The bar chart shows the percentages of the UK workforce in five major industries in 1841 and 2011 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant Write at least 150 words

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The bar chart shows the percentages of the UK workforce in five major industries in 1841 and 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The given bar chart illustrates how the UK workforce was distributed by 5 main industries, namely manufacturing, services, agriculture/fishing, construction and energy/water in 1841 and 2011. The most salient feature is that In both years, the service and manufacturing industry dominated the UK job market. While there was a decline in the percentage of employment in most sectors, the opposite trend was seen in services and construction. In the middle of the 19th century, approximately a third of workers were employed in manufacturing and service, followed closely by agriculture with 22%. In contrast, the industry of construction and energy had the least manpower with only 5% and 3% respectively.
In the early decade of the 21st century, much of the workforce shifted to the service sector, experiencing a 2.5 fold increase, to be exact. On the other hand, agriculture and fishing underwent a significant drop by 2011, from over a fifth of the workforce in 1841 to only a mere 9%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...wer with only 5% and 3% respectively. In the early decade of the 21st century, m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, third, while, in contrast, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 832.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 161.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16770186335 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56210296601 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.43684302426 2.65546596893 129% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.614906832298 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 255.6 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.1379865412 43.030603864 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 118.857142857 112.824112599 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 22.9334400587 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 5.23603664747 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 3.83414634146 52% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16473299986 0.215688989381 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681725610849 0.103423049105 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0549097788675 0.0843802449381 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115695724054 0.15604864568 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384629758068 0.0819641961636 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.2329268293 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 61.2550243902 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.3012195122 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 11.4140731707 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.06136585366 114% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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