Although in the past publicity was mainly found in television adverts, nowadays is almost everywhere. Some people say it can even be used in public schools providing a financial aid to them, while others alert for the potential hazards on the children associated with it. Both parties could have their reasons, but I personally believe that children should be protect from big corporations’ harassment, mainly because children are a vulnerable group and for health reasons as well.
As a starting point of this discussion, we shall focus on the impact that advertisement have on susceptible groups, like children. To be more precise, kids are still developing, physically and psychologically, as well as they can be distracted from their studies. For instance, children are an easy target for big companies, because it is common knowledge what all children like, as candies or superheroes figures. Moreover, if schools are full of colourful pictures and big adverts promoting games on the smartphone, they will rather be playing than studying. These arguments are convincing, but there is one more persuasive topic to consider.
Now, we shall give emphasis to the impact that publicity can have on the health of students. To clarify this, we must focus on diet choices, and also, on the healthy activities that should be done by this age group. As an illustration, if schools are full of Coca-Cola adverts, this will persuade kids to drink more of this product, instead of healthier options, like water or natural fruit juices. In addition to this, if PlayStation games are heavily promoted, they will start to play more, spending more time on the couch, reducing physical exercise, and therefore increasing the incidence of childhood obesity and diabetes. These supporting factors show us why public school should be funded by the state, and not by advertising.
In summary, considering the negative effects of advertising on students, especially children, which are more vulnerable to it, also, being a source of distraction to studies and serious impact on their health, any publicity should be absolutely forbidden in public schools, and when funding is necessary, the government should provide extra support to that institute.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 361, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'protected'?
Suggestion: protected
...sonally believe that children should be protect from big corporations' harassment,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, while, for instance, in addition, in summary, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 10.5418719212 209% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 6.10837438424 246% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 8.36945812808 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 5.94088669951 118% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 20.9802955665 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 31.9359605911 144% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.75862068966 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1891.0 1207.87684729 157% => OK
No of words: 357.0 242.827586207 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29691876751 5.00649968141 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 3.92707691288 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94215536598 2.71678728327 108% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 139.433497537 153% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596638655462 0.580463131201 103% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 379.143842365 152% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.6157635468 173% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 1.71428571429 583% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 0.931034482759 644% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 3.65517241379 246% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6551724138 111% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.5024630542 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.4329998627 50.4703680194 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.071428571 104.977214359 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.9669160288 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78571428571 7.25397266985 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 6.9802955665 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 2.75862068966 109% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156994115248 0.242375264174 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543958266264 0.0925447433944 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562827193115 0.071462118173 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103047308167 0.151781067708 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530643354848 0.0609392437508 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 12.6369458128 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 53.1260098522 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.9458128079 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 11.5310837438 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.32886699507 114% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 55.0591133005 189% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.94827586207 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.3980295567 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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