Many people believe that increasing levels of violence on television and in films is having a direct result on levels of violence in society. Others claim that violence in society is the result of more fundamental social problems such as unemployment. How much do you think society is affected by violence in the media?
The rise in level of violence in society is considered by some to be largely influenced by the violent content shown in programs and movies. While others hold fundamental issues like unemployment, poverty and illiteracy responsible for this rise in trend. In my opinion, fundamental issues are indeed the root cause for such violence in country and media just plays a small part.
To eliminate this negative trend, it is extremely crucial to address basic problems in society such as lack of proper education and a well-paying job for citizens. Firstly, education gives a child a broader perspective and an ability to differentiate between right and wrong. It also helps in finding a decent job to earn living. An illiterate person, for instance, are easy targets for terrorist, powerful politicians and businessmen, as they can be easily manipulated and misused for personal or political benefits. Such people get easily influenced by the negativity in the surrounding and might consider it to be a normal behavior. Unemployment is another major problem, which needs to be addressed. Arranging basic necessities for survival becomes a challenge if none in a family is employed. Dire conditions might also push a person to a volatile state where they are ready to do anything from robbery to murder and can be easily bribed for a small amount of money. Hence, government must put all their efforts to create more job requirements, builds schools and promote benefits of education in every corner of the country.
However, media is also held responsible for broadcasting the idea of violence among citizens. Although, media runs with the idea to connect and entertain world, a medium to release all the stress after a hectic day. Everyone, irrespective of their generation and financial status, enjoys watching their favorite show on television. But sometimes people might get misguided by the negative content like fight sequences. A young kid or a person who is not that well educated or groomed might idealize this behavior and practice it in real life. They might as well teach their friends to do dreadful things. Hence, it’s important for parents to keep a check on what their kids are watching on television and computers.
In conclusion, having a checking on the content being broadcasted by media and government taking necessary steps to resolve fundamental problems is the solution to the violence in society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
... which needs to be addressed. Arranging basic necessities for survival becomes a challenge if non...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2038.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 395.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15949367089 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89233609313 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572151898734 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2118764261 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.9 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141971779801 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0411188962277 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053211035361 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113370648728 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0713683080918 0.056905535591 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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