Contemporary world change so quickly that people cannot follow the time. Changing the technology means changing throughout the world. Hence İ oppose the İdea that states the people now are less happy and less satisfied than our ancients in the past, and İ have a few particular reasons for that.
First of all, nowadays people are more satisfied than the people had lived in the past. everything in our life happens very quickly because of evolving technologies in our lives. For example, if we would have liked to go from another place to another, we can go by some vehicles like car, plan, or by ship. İn the contrast our ancients had lived in tents and traveled all over the world by horses and camels.
Secondly, today we are much happier than past because we do not have any wars how our ancients had fought frequently in the past. Therefore, we live in a piece of life. For inctance, in the past, our ancients had fought as frequently as conquested a lot of area in not so long period of time. Though they had fought a lot, they did it for our bright future.
İn conclution, we have to recognize that we really live in the bright period of life, we have a lot of opportunities that our ancients could not do in the past. As İ exposed above we are much happier and much more satisfied than people had lived in the past.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
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Suggestion:
...ave a few particular reasons for that. First of all, nowadays people are more s...
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Suggestion: Everything
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Message: Did you mean 'had liked'?
Suggestion: had liked
...logies in our lives. For example, if we would have liked to go from another place to another, we...
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Suggestion:
...l over the world by horses and camels. Secondly, today we are much happier than...
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...conquested a lot of area in not so long period of time. Though they had fought a lot, they did...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1090.0 1977.66487455 55% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 244.0 407.700716846 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46721311475 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 4.48103885553 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39209483723 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 212.727598566 57% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495901639344 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 334.8 618.680645161 54% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.8987099083 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.8461538462 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7692307692 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46153846154 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177224299541 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.082198510955 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0778377352617 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13824591693 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10588595463 0.0645574589148 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 86.8835125448 44% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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