Altruism is a type of behavior in which an animal sacrifices its own interest for that of another animal or group of animals. Altruism is the opposite of selfishness; individuals performing altruistic acts gain nothing for themselves.Examples of altruism
The reading passage states that altruism is a very frequent behavior among mammals, such as meerkat and Humans. The professor instead in her lecture contends that those science beliefs and assumptions should be restated on the light of the findings of a new research about Meerkat behavior, and also he cast doubts about human altruistic behavior questioning about the real motive of those actions.
The first point that the professor uses to contrast the reading is that the Meerkat standing in guard while the others are eating is because it has already fed and therefore is not sacrificing its food in exchange for the safety of the community. Moreover standing out near the burrow gives it the possibility to intercept the arrival of predators before all the others and quickly flee away, while the other focused on food may not have the time to react fast enough to fend off the predator.
Another example used in the reading is the human behavior of body organ donation, between relatives or even between two strangers. The professor contends that this kind of action can be very rewarding in terms of social appreciation and approval from the community where these persons live in, and. According to the professor, then, the donors are more rewarded than what the reading states.
In conclusion, the points made in the lecture contrast with reading, in support of her thesis the professor argues the other side of the points made in the reading; the meerkat standing in the guard is not starving for the safety of the community, rather it has already ensured it a meal. In addition the donator reward for a human body organ donation, it is far from little.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 253, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'new research'.
Suggestion: new research
...estated on the light of the findings of a new research about Meerkat behavior, and also he cas...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...t the real motive of those actions. The first point that the professor uses to ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...change for the safety of the community. Moreover standing out near the burrow gives it t...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...er it has already ensured it a meal. In addition the donator reward for a human body org...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... organ donation, it is far from little.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, while, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1391.0 1373.03311258 101% => OK
No of words: 284.0 270.72406181 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89788732394 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47273116709 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 145.348785872 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552816901408 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 21.2450331126 146% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.5339432788 49.2860985944 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.555555556 110.228320801 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.5555555556 21.698381199 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5555555556 7.06452816374 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0901296654226 0.272083759551 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0382912781342 0.0996497079465 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0336327032914 0.0662205650399 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0500887363408 0.162205337803 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0203970816962 0.0443174109184 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.3589403974 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 53.8541721854 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.0289183223 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.7273730684 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.498013245 137% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.2008830022 152% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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