TPO-29 - Integrated Writing Task Large numbers of dinosaur fossils have been discovered in deposits on Alaska's North Slope, a region that today experiences an extremely cold,arctic climate. One hundred million years ago, when those dinosaurs were alive,

Both the reading and the lecture debate the migrating behavior of the elephant-sized dinosaurs Alaska’s North slope Edmontosaur, which was very common on North’s slope. The author of the reading supports the migration Hypothesis, whereas the lecturer contends that is unlikely that the Edmontosaurus had a migratory behavior.

The first argument used by the author is that the Edmontosaur exclusively fed on plants, but the climate during the North slope winter was not favorable to plant growth, therefore these animals had to move southwards for feeding. The lecturer states during that period the climate was warmer than today and in some periods of the year the sun shone 24 hours, and the plants were present all the year long.

Second, the author argues that several skeletons have been found in the same site, and this suggests that Edmontosaurus lived in herds. The author points out that many modern-day migratory animals live and migrate in held, thus this another proof in supporting the migration theory. The lecturer rebuts this claim using an example of same species of today animal that live in herds but they do not migrate, they live in herds to get extra protection.

Finally, the reading says that the Edmontosaurus was physically capable of migrating long distances, but the lecturer mentions on the fact that the juveniles are not as capable as adults and they would never have made it, so in order to protect the offspring the adults had to stay in the North slope for survival.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 231, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...als had to move southwards for feeding. The lecturer states during that period the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, second, so, therefore, thus, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1270.0 1373.03311258 92% => OK
No of words: 250.0 270.72406181 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6500898098 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 387.9 419.366225166 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 21.2450331126 146% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.6145584986 49.2860985944 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.75 110.228320801 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.25 21.698381199 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 7.06452816374 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.40640125608 0.272083759551 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.166027477228 0.0996497079465 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058502737499 0.0662205650399 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217816077633 0.162205337803 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0351171812485 0.0443174109184 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.3589403974 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 53.8541721854 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.0289183223 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 63.6247240618 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.7273730684 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.498013245 137% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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