In today's societies, the question of whether young people have influence on strategic decision that can change the future of society as a whole has become controversial in many circles and camp. Different people have distinct responses to this topic based on their cultural, social and even familial backgrounds. However, as far as I concern, In my point of view, I truly thing they youth is the key for a better future.
First of all, our generation still failing in make the world a better place to live in peace and respecting to each other traditions and culture. On other words, after the Second war, and Cold War, some people may say that we have been living in an era of peace, which is wrong. Since then a lot of small conflicts have developed and many of them lasts until now. For instance, have a look on Syria, Palestine, Iran were civilians are being mass murdered. Furthermore, in the Europe’s east Russia still fighting separatist. In addition, the number of terrorist attacks around the word has rising since then, showing us that we fail in keep peace and respect each other. So, the next generation have the challenge to change this scenario.
Another noteworthy aspect that should be mentioned is that our word has limited natural resources. Although the concern about the environment and creation and implementation of sustainable practices in many countries, we continue emitting a large scale of pollution to the environment. For example, our principal energetical source is fossil's fuel instead renewable sources like sun, wind, rivers. In this case, the young people will have a huge importance to develop new technologies to change this situation.
To sum up, there are plenty of reasons that the young ones will have to take important decisions to determine a better future. No only to improve peace and understanding but also in take care a of the environment. Consequentially, it is imperative that next generation will determine the future of society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 22, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
In todays societies, the question of whether young people have influence on strategi...
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Line 4, column 193, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...and understanding but also in take care a of the environment. Consequentially, it...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, second, so, still, then, for example, for instance, in addition, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1657.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00604229607 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83586847987 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.607250755287 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.0865464807 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4705882353 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4705882353 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.41176470588 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162261231557 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0470216988086 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621749418996 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103908654864 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055002334207 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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