After graduation all people want is to find a job and start to word as soon as possible. However, some people begin question if it is better a position where the emplyee do the same task every day or work in different type of tasks during the day. In my point of view, I think it is better do a wide variety of activities all day long becouse it lead workes to be more efficient. Furthermore it stimulates then to not be carless.
First of all, I have been reading some studies about job efficiency and several of them explained that our ability to focus in one activity decreases over time. It was concluded that by doing only one task during the day the efficiency of work was compromised due the lack of focus. As consequence, many mistakes were commited. For example, once i had a job in a publicity company. My job consisted in review all the articles before they were publicated online on the internet. At the begining I was excited, It was my first job. However, after a while I started to feel bored, my focus goes down and I begin to do a lot of mistakes in my reviews. At the time, talking to my boss, he sugested me to assimilate more task on the office, and it worked.
Second, If the job start to be boring, the job activity became unpleasant. For instance, a person who work in same task for a long time begin to question 'why I'm here working with it?' the resoult is a employee careless about the job that can do mistakes or even cause acidents. For example, my father told me that his coworker lost a hand becouse by doing the same activity everey day become carreless and forget some principles about safety.
To sum up, becouse of the gain in eficiency and due the careless behavior developed in those who do the same task all thay long, I prefer to work in dinamic company where my routine of work could be full of different tasks.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 347, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'leads'?
Suggestion: leads
...y of activities all day long becouse it lead workes to be more efficient. Furthermor...
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Line 1, column 381, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...se it lead workes to be more efficient. Furthermore it stimulates then to not be carless. ...
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Line 3, column 347, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...stakes were commited. For example, once i had a job in a publicity company. My jo...
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Line 5, column 159, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...k for a long time begin to question why Im here working with it? the resoult is a ...
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Line 5, column 184, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...o question why Im here working with it? the resoult is a employee careless about th...
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Line 5, column 199, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...Im here working with it? the resoult is a employee careless about the job that ca...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, then, while, for example, for instance, i think, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1512.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.36994219653 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47128586652 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520231213873 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3982611043 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.9411764706 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3529411765 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88235294118 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203019137627 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0644243559693 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644040403676 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136810419705 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0485495158248 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.07 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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