TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.U

In today's society the question of whether is more difficult to teach childrens that once was in the past due the fact they spend so much time on cell phone, video games and infront a computer has become controversial among people in many circles and camps. Different people have a variety of responses to this tocpic based on their cultural, social or even famiial backgound. As far as I concern, I believe that this behavior truly make things harder in educating children.

To begin with, although all this technology make easier the access to information, children usually spend a lots of time doing thing not related to educational means. They spend hours on online games, web chats and social networking. None of theses activities help them acquire knowledge. In addition, some reaserchs reveal that the interest in school decrease in kids that spend more time in this technologies, apears that their concetration diminish in class becouse their are ansious to use a computer or smartphone.

Another noteworthy aspect that should be mentioned is that cheating is easier than has ever been. Since the access to information is not a problem anymore, the youngster copy homeworks and paperson from web without even read or do some amendments. Therfore, teachers around the word has reporting that the use of cell phone during academic tests is rising which suggest that kids are cheating more and more.

To sum up, the use of technology in modern's life has lead us to a big chalenge in educating children. I think that due the fact that children are using baddly their smatphones, computers and internt, it is important to parens to control and moderate the access of these technologies.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 19, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
In todays society the question of whether is more difficult to teach childrens th...
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Line 3, column 107, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: a lot; lots
... to information, children usually spend a lots of time doing thing not related to educ...
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Line 3, column 394, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ecrease in kids that spend more time in this technologies, apears that their concetr...
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Line 3, column 470, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
... concetration diminish in class becouse their are ansious to use a computer or smartp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, i think, in addition, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1415.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 283.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.670008249 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.60777385159 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8101162012 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.916666667 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5833333333 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24071677942 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0772861045274 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0735915873435 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128756622859 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0636858803297 0.0645574589148 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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