You are planning to go abroad for study. You wish to do a part time job. Ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to him and in your letter:
. Give some details of your study plans
. explain why you need a part time job
. suggest how your friend can be of help
Hi Malisa
I Hope that this epistle of mine will find you in good health and your professional life is going good. I am penning this letter to tell you about my planning to do higher studies in Australia and need your assistance in finding a job.
I have decided to do masters in Data Science for Python from Australia. I applied for third degree of education in the University of Australia and the institute provides me an offer letter also. My course will start in next month. I have also cleared an IELTS exam as it is mandatory to apply for student visa.
I want you to help me by finding a part time job so that I can pay my fees and handle my all the expenses while living in unknown city. As you know well that my father is the only earning hand in our family. He has to run the house as well as has to pay college fees of my younger brother. My father is not financially strong that he will also pay my university expenses. He has arranged money for my tickets by withdrawing from his fixed deposit account.
You are living in Sydney from long time and have lots of contacts. So, it would be easy for you to find a part time job for me so that I would not become burden on my parents.
Take care!! and give my love to your children. I will let you know about the flight tickets as soon as I will book.
Yours truly
Flora
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ed your assistance in finding a job. I have decided to do masters in Data Scie...
^
Line 5, column 73, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...Data Science for Python from Australia. I applied for third degree of education i...
^
Line 5, column 190, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...e institute provides me an offer letter also. My course will start in next month. I ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 36, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
.... I want you to help me by finding a part time job so that I can pay my fees and handl...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 137, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... expenses while living in unknown city. As you know well that my father is the onl...
^^
Line 9, column 107, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... So, it would be easy for you to find a part time job for me so that I would not become b...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 13, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...e burden on my parents. Take care!! and give my love to your children. I will l...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, third, well, while, as to, you know, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 1.00243902439 898% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 5.60731707317 892% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1089.0 965.302439024 113% => OK
No of words: 260.0 196.424390244 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.18846153846 4.92477711251 85% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24033426817 2.65546596893 84% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 106.607317073 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 343.8 283.868780488 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 1.53170731707 914% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 8.94146341463 179% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.5470212731 43.030603864 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.0625 112.824112599 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.25 22.9334400587 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8125 5.23603664747 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283516397488 0.215688989381 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0923909358011 0.103423049105 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748311138616 0.0843802449381 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161283350311 0.15604864568 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0757860878845 0.0819641961636 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.4 13.2329268293 48% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 61.2550243902 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.3012195122 58% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 6.73 11.4140731707 59% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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