When famous people such as actors, athletes and rock stars give their opinions, many people listen. Do you think we should pay attention to these opinions? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answe
Personalities have the power to influence average people's opinions, and this can be a positive or a negative thing, according to the message they send. From my point of view, people should listen to public persons whenever their messages are constructive, unbiased and so forth. I will explain my statement in the following essay.
First and foremost, famous people are adulated and admired by billions of humans because they seem to have a perfect life. As a consequence, average people are sensitive to messages received from them, and most of times they follow them. This could have positive results if the message is helpful and pro-active. For instance, my country has one of the biggest virgin forests in Europe, but unfortunately investors and businessmen are trying to exploit it, endangering the whole ecosystem. I have recently read a message from a well-known actor, Leonardo DiCaprio, who was asking my people to fight against this injustice towards environment, and to appreciate the treasure we have. Therefore, I start making some online researches about this theme and I found a petition against destroying our inheritance, and I signed. Thus, productive messages needs our attention.
To continue with, racism has gradually increased during the last centuries and numerous people suffer from this. Furthermore, immigration, terrorist attacks and wars have greatly contributed to this, making some people undesirable in most of places of the world. Some stardom individuals fight against prejudice, against misjudging individuals according to their race, color, religion, tradition, sexual orientation, underlining that Earth belongs to everyone and some personal preferences are part of humans' rights. Undoubtedly, addressing these issues is not an easy call, because they expose themselves to criticism, risking to lose everything. However, they know this is an efficient method to arouse awareness among people, and thus it is a step for a better, wealthy, peaceful world.
To summarize, individuals should listen to famous people's opinions when they can create positive outcomes. This is due to the fact that their messages can contribute to people's efforts to preserve the nature and because they march for equality amid people from everywhere. So, both nature and humans can benefit from this.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 207, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the times') or simply say ''most times''.
Suggestion: most of the times; most times
...ive to messages received from them, and most of times they follow them. This could have posit...
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Line 5, column 235, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the places') or simply say ''most places''.
Suggestion: most of the places; most places
...this, making some people undesirable in most of places of the world. Some stardom individuals ...
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Line 5, column 621, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'risking losing'.
Suggestion: risking losing
...se they expose themselves to criticism, risking to lose everything. However, they know this is ...
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Line 7, column 170, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
...t that their messages can contribute to peoples efforts to preserve the nature and beca...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1965.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45833333333 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87516907715 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3260276187 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.166666667 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27777777778 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134753738217 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0463489958359 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556905724296 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0981303309147 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428124539905 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.45 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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