Generally, people adapt their lives to changes in modern technologies. However, that's shouldn't take away the perfection of work. Thus, as far as I'm concerned, I disagree that it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than work slowly and making sure the accuracy of work. I'm holding this thought for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, the more persons do their jobs quickly, the higher work-load will be; this because of the inaccuracy of job performance. Moreover, an over-worked person leads to high work stress, which is not healthy. An example of this is the differing experiences that my brother and I had in our jobs. My brother works as an engineer and I work as a pharmacist. My brother's method of doing his job is favorable of doing it as fast as he can, while I'm the opposite. Eventually, most of his work appeared to be inaccurate and he repeated his work again and again because of making a lot of mistakes. This started to build up in his work and his day became over-load of work. This developed stress to get the work done correctly. Thereafter, he had a constant high blood pressure due to work stress. On the other hand, I work slowly and more precisely which helped me not to repeat the work more often, like my brother. I usually had no pressure during my work by doing it this way; thus, I have perfect body health. Accordingly, from these experiences I believe it is more important to do work slowly than quickly to avoid stress and stress-related diseases.
Another reason working quickly is not preferable is that a person will have negative impression in workplace, which could affect his/her career. Managers and leaders of companies want someone who do their job without many mistakes and working quickly can cause the person to make a lot of work errors, which may lead to bad outcomes. For example, if I did my work quickly as a pharmacist I would expect to make many mistakes in my workplace, which is not ideal and dangerous. A mistake from me could cost a person live and I would expect myself in prison or faired from my work. Moreover, no one will trust me to provide him/her a health service. Thus, it is more worthwhile for a person to take his/her own time in preforming work; otherwise, it could lead to negative outcomes.
All in all, it is more beneficial to preform work in slow and accurate way than fast and incorrect way. This is because of having less stress in work environment and to avoid bad consequences by working quickly.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, while, for example, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2092.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62831858407 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6415262143 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480088495575 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 648.0 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4975546889 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.1666666667 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8333333333 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.29166666667 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30565998427 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102041746232 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0874898787336 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209550827412 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660688760983 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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