TPO-15 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans

In recent times, there is a widespread debate about children and learning to manage money. One of the questions under this debate is whether children should learn to manage their own money at a young age in order to become financially responsible at an adult age or not. As far as I'm concerned, I think it is more worthwhile to have children learn to control their budget from a young age, so I firmly agree with the statement. I'm inclined to agree for two main benefits, which I will explore in the following essay.

In the first place, I think children at a young age are capable of learning new experiences, and if they learned from this age, their experience will never get away from their heads. Thus, it is helpful for their future financial management. My own experience is a compelling example of this. My father is a successful man in finance. When I was young my father used to take me with him and taught me how he used to manage our home expenses. Some of these expenses were paying bills, going to groceries to buy the home needs, and going to the local bank in our town. There were more places where I used to observe my father how he managed these situations financially. Eventually, at the end of the day, he used to let me review what we had done on the same day. When I became an adult, I learned all of my father traits at managing or controlling the money. The lessons I learned from him won't get out from my brain because I experienced them by myself with my father. Thus, I'm a successful man, just like my father, in finance.

Another benefit of children being learned to manage and control their money at a young age is developing an autonomous man. Taking responsibilities is an important step to be an independent person, and these accountabilities become easy to handle when a person had experienced them before. So, it is worthier to teach children at a young age managing their financial issue in order to become an accountable person when they at an adult age. To prove this opinion, I had read a study research on this topic. In the study, a survey conducted by several scientists in 14 major cities in Turkey shows that ninety-one percent of people learned their financial responsibilities during their childhood and become they can manage their accountabilities more comfortably. For that reason, I personally think it is more successful to let children learn their responsibilities from a young age in which they likely become familiar with these responsibilities in the future.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, thus, while, i think, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2076.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67567567568 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86111928642 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472972972973 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 666.0 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1854127687 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8571428571 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1428571429 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.61904761905 5.45110844103 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373825002787 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115345614722 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100682730103 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.287536120664 0.150856017488 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0911739401045 0.0645574589148 141% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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