TPO-16 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

I agree with the statements the best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. I have two reasons explain my agreement.

First, travelling with a group led by a tour guide makes our time more entertainment. In my opinion, I prefer to go to explore places with friends and family all the time. In this way I can have fun and talk with them about how amazing the place was. Also, going with people that I can talk to help me remember those places. For instance, three years ago I went to very old place with a lot of antique tools. I remembered that I was walking with my friend beside one of the unique tool that had been discovered 100 years ago. My friend asked the person, who usually work in that place, "How did you bring this tool to the museum?" the worker told as the story of this tool that I never forgot it because I was talking with my friend about it. Thus, going with group make me more inquisitive to explore around the places.

Second, a tour guide is very important for us since we are new to the place. A tour guide have many benefit for us. For example, the tour guide will guide us to focus on the most valuable parts of the place. Five years ago I want to New York, United States. I went to have fun and explore the place with the most amusing parts of NY. When I arrived there I could not find places that meet my needs. I had to ask around and search by myself which is waste time. I was planing to go for at least ten places, but eventually I went for three places only. My friend who went to NY after a month of my trip told me that he went for 13 places with a group that was led by a tour guide.

Thus, the best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 96, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun benefit seems to be countable; consider using: 'many benefits'.
Suggestion: many benefits
...are new to the place. A tour guide have many benefit for us. For example, the tour guide wil...
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Line 5, column 335, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...lace with the most amusing parts of NY. When I arrived there I could not find places...
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Line 5, column 430, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...my needs. I had to ask around and search by myself which is waste time. I was pla...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, second, so, thus, at least, for example, for instance, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1374.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.0293255132 4.8611393121 83% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.10846157254 2.67179642975 79% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475073313783 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 430.2 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.7735734747 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.7 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.05 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17715781156 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0779682675357 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122373042227 0.0737576698707 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224333083145 0.150856017488 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.140637616519 0.0645574589148 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.1 11.7677419355 52% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 58.1214874552 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 5.8 10.9000537634 53% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.24 8.01818996416 78% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 86.8835125448 44% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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