people who go to live in other countries, should follow the customs and traditions of the new coun-try. to what extent do you agree or disagree?
Global economic recession, especially in developing countries, has obliged a growing number of people to abandon their mother-countries so as to lead a better life in developed countries. Albeit, this upward trend has resulted in a heated debate as to whether migrants should integrate themselves with their new home’s culture. From my standpoint, complying with destination country’s culture is an imperative prerequisite for people who have decided to settle their roots in a new country.
On the one hand, a sizeable number of individuals adhere to the idea of assigning cultural preservation as a high priority. They often argue that people should not simply evade their responsibilities for their national intangible heritages, ranging from their mother tongues to their costumes. They believe that people should do their utmost to ensure their children are exposed to the culture of their ancestors. In addition, some outspoken advocates of this perspective cite that cultural diversity may lead to a better co-operation within individuals since they will not feel any type of discrimination in society. Having accepted skilled workers of diverse nationalities with quite different backgrounds, and in some cases conflicting, Canada, these days, is renowned for its dynamic and effective society.
Although no one can explicitly deny the potentially positive aspects of living in a society consisted of various cultures, I tend to align myself with the latter opinion claiming that having a united nation, in which all citizens are willing to comply with the same culture can be more productive. People leave their homelands in search of a higher standard of living. One chief reason prettifying their main cause of migration might be lack of job security in their countries; thus, it appears advisable to urge them at least try to respect their hosts’ culture and make determined attempts in order to unify themselves with new rituals and values. Moreover, many employers are solely interested in recruiting job applicants who have obtained a higher level of social integration. Meaning that there would be a great likelihood of losing proper job opportunities, were newcomers to refute lining themselves with new conditions, including following dominating social values.
Taking all above-mentioned points into consideration, I need to reaffirm my allegation giving an emphasis to the importance of following the traditions of the country in which we are supposed to lead our rest of lives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 137, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...eople to abandon their mother-countries so as to lead a better life in developed countri...
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Line 1, column 247, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...d trend has resulted in a heated debate as to whether migrants should integrate themselves wi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, moreover, so, thus, as to, at least, in addition, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.5418719212 95% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 6.10837438424 164% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 8.36945812808 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 5.94088669951 151% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 20.9802955665 181% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 31.9359605911 204% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 5.75862068966 174% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2136.0 1207.87684729 177% => OK
No of words: 389.0 242.827586207 160% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49100257069 5.00649968141 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 3.92707691288 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10752578695 2.71678728327 114% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 139.433497537 174% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622107969152 0.580463131201 107% => OK
syllable_count: 672.3 379.143842365 177% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.6157635468 152% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6551724138 111% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.5024630542 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.7872503643 50.4703680194 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.571428571 104.977214359 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7857142857 20.9669160288 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 7.25397266985 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 6.9802955665 129% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 2.75862068966 109% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112239286797 0.242375264174 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0408013920828 0.0925447433944 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0278286690294 0.071462118173 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.070345637939 0.151781067708 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278549936752 0.0609392437508 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 12.6369458128 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 53.1260098522 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.9458128079 137% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 11.5310837438 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.58 8.32886699507 127% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 55.0591133005 251% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.94827586207 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.3980295567 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.5123152709 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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