The diagram shows the procedures in the process of manufacturing yogurt.
First, pour the milk into a pot and boil in 90 degree Celsius (200 Fahrenheit) for 30 minutes. The more time it is boiled, the thicker the yogurt. Next, keep the milk cool down to 44 degree Celsius (112 Fahrenheit).
Then, add live bacteria of yogurt starter into the milk. Keep the milk for four hours until its temperature drops to 37 degree Celsius (100 Fahrenheit). Afterwards, put the pot of milk into the fridge. After a while, add 3 strawberries and sugar into it. Stir it well.
Finally, it is poured into cups as yogurt. It is then processed in lorries into our home.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, then, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 17.0 33.7804878049 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 540.0 965.302439024 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 116.0 196.424390244 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65517241379 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.28181803491 3.73543355544 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53060928496 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 74.0 106.607317073 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.637931034483 0.547539520022 117% => OK
syllable_count: 152.1 283.868780488 54% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 10.0 22.4926829268 44% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.847707295 43.030603864 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 49.0909090909 112.824112599 44% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 10.5454545455 22.9334400587 46% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.23603664747 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165310828248 0.215688989381 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0888000625791 0.103423049105 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.176729833102 0.0843802449381 209% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203041334546 0.15604864568 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.250770529322 0.0819641961636 306% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.8 13.2329268293 44% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 86.71 61.2550243902 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 3.7 10.3012195122 36% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.56 11.4140731707 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 23.0 40.7170731707 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 11.4329268293 44% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.0 10.9970731707 55% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 6.0 11.0658536585 54% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 150 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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