Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.
Patriotism is something that involves patriotic emotions, feeling and actions of people who love his native land and are proud of it. Even though it is considered as a positive feature, sometimes it causes to negative situations such as arguing, discorting among residents of different countries. Nowadays the solution of this problem is the subject of discussion, for example, some people think that worldwide events like the football World Cup, Olympic Games and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. I totally agree with this statement but before drawing a quick conclusion, it needs to be discussed.
In my opinion, the major function of international events is to assemble people from different countries with various nationalty all over the world in one place for racing. In such famous competitons the winners are always estimated for their personal qualities such as strength, force or other abilities, not depending on their nationality. For instance, sportsmen from the enemy countries forget their national problems with each other and concentrate only on competition and to my mind, this way is absoluetly effective for releasing patriotic emotions and make stable atmosphere. Although the number of the pros of international competitions is remarkebly more, it is an undeniable fact that sometimes there can be some qwarrels, most times among the fans of different teams.
In conclusion, I want to emphasise that even if sometimes the results of such events are disappointing, it is the best way to to ease the international tension.
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