Nowadays, more and more people do not live healthy and believe they might be cured by physicians and medication. I'm absolutely agree with this statement and in this essay will support my opinion and provide examples.
Generally population in all world countries getting older, what goes along with disorders as body become older and used. Nevertheless our society rely on modern medicine and its powerful effects. For example, obesity, as a current treat for our generation due to everywhere presented fast foods, pubs serving junky food and stressful life style, affects more people than ever. Obese individuals instead of involve them self into gyms, fitness, swimming or any other sport activity, seeking help from doctors. Era of liposuction is gone, because, after procedure dietary requirements have been necessary. Modern medicine presented new modern method for obese people, which allows them to keep eating unhealthy food, poise their body, but do not increase weight. Principe is easy, the tube size of small finger is inserted into the stomach to allow aspiration of partially digested food out.
Secondly, and in my opinion the most dangerous trend of modern society is using PrEP between gay society. Break through of distribution of PrEP to homosexual community reduced possibility of infection by HIV or AIDS, however, more sexual transmission diseases have been diagnosed since. Although risk of HIV and AIDS have been reduce, research of side effects of this medication have not been finished. Gay men are now more likely presented in Emergency room with liver or kidney failure as a side effect of PrEP. In my view, this negative trend should be reduce by promoting health lifestyle such as safe sex practice, instead of relying on so called "magic pill to stop AIDS".
To sum up, as medical professional I see on daily basis how modern medicine changed human behaviour and made them slaves of it.
- The use of mobile phone is as antisocial as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places so mobile phone should be banned like smoking. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 78
- Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting event bring more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and include your opinion, supported by examples 78
- Some people think that children should obey rules and listen to their parents and teachers. Others believe less control from teachers and parents will help children deal with adult life better. Discuss on both sides and give your opinion. 84
- Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos.discuss both these views and give your opinion. 84
- As E-books are available online these days, the value of printed books has diminished. Agree or disagree? 84
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, for example, such as, in my opinion, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1624.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20512820513 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62466929134 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.698717948718 0.561755894193 124% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.9288789896 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.266666667 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46666666667 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112276329472 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0328510692377 0.084324248473 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0320969735292 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0629825805555 0.151304729494 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0488102687943 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.89 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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