In contemporary society, due to the extensive schedules of work or study, time is commonly considered as one of the most valuable things. In light of this, free time is something that should be wisely used among people, especially among families, and that’s why I think busy parents should mainly use their time doing fun activities with their children.
Frist, people just want to relax and have pleasant activities after a stressful day. If parents decided to spend their free time with their children’s favorite hobbies, the whole family would be distracted and have a good day. I have a good example to illustrate this. When I was in school, my classes finished at 4 pm on Fridays and until the time I got home, it was almost 6 pm and the day was basically over. So, my dad decided to change his schedule and pick me on school every Friday to do something fun, like go to the park to see the sunset or play volleyball on the beach. With this small change, both of us were having fun and enjoying our time together, which was something that we usually did not have time to do.
Second, family members spend little time together because of their daily duties. As soon as people arrive at home, they barely share with their families how was the day and what happened. The free time should be used between the family members to social interaction and share of daily events. My family members, for example, organized the “Fun Monday”, which is when our whole family gets together before the dinner playing games, talking and having fun, which is something that probably would not happen if my parents mainly use their time helping me with my schoolwork.
As last, children are already overwhelmed with schoolwork when they arrive at home. As mentioned, the free time should be used for relaxing and enjoyable activities. If parents decide to spend time with their children talking about schoolwork, there is a big chance of making them more stressed and unmotivated to study the next day. Alternatively, parents can study with their children on specific days or even weekends, for example. My 10-year-old cousin, for example, used to study every single day after school and started to be stressed and tired, resulting in a decrease of his grades. Hence, his parents decided to study with him only on Wednesdays and Saturdays, so he would not get overloaded with his schoolwork and also have some free time to have fun, which resulted in higher grades.
In conclusion, these are a few of the several reasons why I think that busy parents should mainly use the time with their children for fun activities. Schoolwork is also extremely important for children’s lives, however, it is also important to find a balance.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 731, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hat we usually did not have time to do. Second, family members spend little time...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, second, so, for example, i think, in conclusion, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2276.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84255319149 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61512126149 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487234042553 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 703.8 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6561766563 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.8 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353631929435 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119718297573 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073134716588 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222092024195 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0379684427578 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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