Parents always concern about whether their kids can overcome the gap between adulthood and childhood, therefore, they will give some suggestions and help. One way is to encourage their teenage children to take a part-time job. I approve of this to a large extent.
Most teenagers live in a relatively unsophisticated environment, people they always stay with are their schoolmates and things they meet are easy to tackle . when they grow up and come into society, they have to contact with various people and encounter a mass of difficult things. However, if they are totally fresh at that time, they may feel pressured and anxious. A part-time job is a really good chance for them to learn about society, at the same they can ask for a hand from parents, for example, how to express themselves appropriately, how to arrange their time for daily life, work and study and so on. What is more, they will be more brave.
In addition, just like young birds will leave their parents to fly by themselves, teenagers will leave parents to live independently. Taking a part-time job and making money by their own hands will let them know how to make living and have the consciousness to make plan for how to spend.
- TPO-24 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples 60
- Do you agree or disagree the following statement The rapid growth cities today s should have a positive effect of the development of the society 48
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Suggestion: When
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... work and study and so on. What is more, they will be more brave. In addition,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, really, so, therefore, for example, in addition, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1002.0 1977.66487455 51% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 210.0 407.700716846 52% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77142857143 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 4.48103885553 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66926062229 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 212.727598566 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.628571428571 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 306.9 618.680645161 50% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.3956952108 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.2 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.9 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227293383242 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0969109576348 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116718773747 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170337426866 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565973218798 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 86.8835125448 45% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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