The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, busor train between 1970 and 2030.

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The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus
or train between 1970 and 2030.

Submitted by steward on Fri, 07/13/2018 - 07:19

The line graph illustrates information about the number of commuters who used three categories of transports, namely car, bus and train in the UK over the course of 60 years starting in 1970.

Overall, it is immediately obvious that there were a considerable upward trend in the number of commuters using car and train over the period shown, while the figure for Bus fell steadily.

Looking at the details, around 5 million of commuters travelling each day by car, which was the highest number in 1970, why the figures for bus and train were lower, stood at above 4 million and under 2 million. Despite having remained stable at approximately 4 million from 1970 to 1980, the figure for bus will fell steadily to just under 3 million in 2030.

By contrast ,If we look at the number of people using car to go to work, having remained at above 5 million from 1970 to 1980, then the figure rose considerably to above 7 million in 2000, after that, car is expected to become the most common form of transport, reach the peak at about 9 million in 2030, which is the highest point of the whole graph. As regards Train, there was a steady increase in the number of people, from above 2 million in 1970 to exactly 3 million in 2000, at which point it levelled off at just around 3 million until 2010. After that, a significant rise is predicted for this form of transport reaching nearly 5 million in 2030.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 12, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... under 3 million in 2030. By contrast ,If we look at the number of people using...
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Line 7, column 189, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...considerably to above 7 million in 2000, after that, car is expected to become th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, then, while, as regards

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 33.7804878049 175% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1159.0 965.302439024 120% => OK
No of words: 254.0 196.424390244 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56299212598 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46511088058 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 106.607317073 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511811023622 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 333.9 283.868780488 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.07073170732 467% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 22.4926829268 160% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.9943947198 43.030603864 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.571428571 112.824112599 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.2857142857 22.9334400587 158% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.23603664747 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215837053802 0.215688989381 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118444881028 0.103423049105 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678408172581 0.0843802449381 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156662118494 0.15604864568 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459610645677 0.0819641961636 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.2329268293 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.32 61.2550243902 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.3012195122 134% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.76 11.4140731707 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.4329268293 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.9970731707 149% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.0658536585 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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