A lot of people think that if a person is not a brilliant student is because they don't put much afford in his or her studies, others instead believe that there are also other causes, such as not well-prepared teachers or poor activities offered by the school. I do believe that studying hard is very important, but it is not the only way to be successful in school.
First of all, learning is energy consuming activities, it is a responsibility of the teachers to try always new teaching methods and keep their students focused. In my experience, when I was at primary school I really enjoyed the math lessons only because my teacher used to create always new games to practice the use of numbers. I don't think I would have been so interested in math as I did if the teacher would have asked us to repeat over and over again the numbers table.
Second, sometimes the material used by teachers are out of date or monotonous, this is because they feel confident to use always the same books or slides over the years, but sometimes use alternative material can be very beneficial for students. For example, I remember when my biology teacher used to play a video to show as the biological process she had been talking about, and this exactly in the middle of the lessons, it was the best thing to give us a bit of rest and we kept focused for the rest of her lessons, probably I would have lost half of the notions in a normal boring class.
also, I do believe that for being a good student it is also very important to be surrounded by supportive people such as friends and family. they help you to stay focused and use in the best way your energy. I am a very lucky person, every time I am studying for an exam, my mum always prepare lunch and dinner and she does not ask for help, so I can use all my time studying hard and be more relaxed, this is very important for a student overall performance in school.
In conclusion, study hard is not the only way to be a brilliant student, there are a series of factors that can affect both negatively and positively a student, even studying hard is the most important, a student needs to be relaxed and have the good stimuli.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 83, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...not a brilliant student is because they dont put much afford in his or her studies, ...
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Line 1, column 155, Rule ID: ALSO_OTHER[1]
Message: Use simply 'there are other' or 'there are also'
Suggestion: there are other; there are also
...er studies, others instead believe that there are also other causes, such as not well-prepared teach...
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Line 3, column 276, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put before the verb 'create'.
Suggestion: always create
...lessons only because my teacher used to create always new games to practice the use of number...
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Line 3, column 334, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...games to practice the use of numbers. I dont think I would have been so interested i...
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Line 3, column 409, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had asked'?
Suggestion: had asked
...erested in math as I did if the teacher would have asked us to repeat over and over again the nu...
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Line 5, column 119, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put before the verb 'use'.
Suggestion: always use
... this is because they feel confident to use always the same books or slides over the years...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...he notions in a normal boring class. also, I do believe that for being a good stu...
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Line 7, column 142, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...tive people such as friends and family. they help you to stay focused and use in the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, talking about, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1778.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40099009901 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52180472454 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485148514851 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 572.4 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 20.1344086022 179% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.7672233274 48.9658058833 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.636363636 100.406767564 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.7272727273 20.6045352989 178% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1818181818 5.45110844103 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0409870469199 0.236089414692 17% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0195674965102 0.076458572812 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0177309818695 0.0737576698707 24% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0226962332773 0.150856017488 15% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0149975782631 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.86 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.83 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.0537634409 163% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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