The parents have an important role of improvement on their children for all aspect as the children need to take care since they were born. In my opinion, it is better that wasting a time with children is playing games or doing sports together. I feel this way for two main reasons which i will explore in the following essay.
Firstly, playing video or any kind of games and sport activities can help the parents and their children to establish a good relationship. Spending time together with these activities is closely support the relationship between parents and their children. My own experience is a compelling example of this. My father and I had a good time when we had played together the video game which is name is Combat. By this means, we were like a friend beyond the relationship of father-son because the game was our common entartainment.
Secondly, it is essential that doing any kind of sports which is supported by parents make an huge impact on children in terms of habits of healhty life. The parents can make a big difference in sport habits with encouraging and accompaying their children. There is an example of this argument in my life. My father is used to go out for a run every day on weekends and i have attend this activities since when i was 8 years old. So, we have enjoyed together and special moments through run events. After this events,we have conversation time until reach to home and this speakings are always be in my mind as a special moments.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that wasting time with children by playing games or doing sports is better choice. This is because making good relationship between parents-children and gain sport habbit to children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1419.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 297.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77777777778 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73673795011 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501683501684 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 427.5 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.8600904218 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6875 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5625 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4375 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263680210349 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946625280203 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804607483285 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183416713716 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272402434118 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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