Nowadays, young people handle with many improvements to help and improve their community's welfare. These young people able to reach a point of different views for their current time and future. Many of them spend their time in social media to advocate human rights. In addition, volunteering is famous between young groups rather than adults. Furthermore, start up business prjects have done great jobs to change the world.
First of all, these days beign social means much more than just to be outside. Social media has more effective resources and sharing information places to keep and conduct many organizations. For example, twitter is considered the biggest information sharing platform. Many young people first react from twitter to events that are happening in commonity. They can easily warn if they think something is wrong with government's decision. In my country, Turkey, government once decided to increase to price of gasoline about 20 percente from the current. There was not an actual reason people can found. A young group from twitter impacted to this situation by turning off their cars at the same time while they were passing the bridge. Govenments took their decision back subsequently and this situation was congraculated by many areas of community.
Secondly, espacially in the United States, volunteering is so common between young people. They like to help out others that they need essential help. For example, I joined to a young group that they were palnning to paint an old school located in San Francisco, California. We bought all painting equipments by putting only twenty dollar by each of us. The school was very old and the students were not getting their educate in a clean place. We painted all the classes in the school and the manager and all students were so happy. Being a part of a volunteering is definitely for young groups and they do their best.
On the other hand, many start upp business projects have done great jobs until now. One of the big improvment is a new internet based paying system called Paypal. Paypal was established by Elon Musk which is a great entreprenuer. In his young ages, he attemped many start up projects but the biggest one was Paypal. By using paypal, you can pay anything you purchase from the internet even if you are outside of the United States. This allowed and facilitate many different communities to have far-reaching marketing systems and sell their products abroad. Elon Musk is still known to be as a the biggest entreprenuer in the world with his jobs that he made while he was young.
In conclusion, young people will be our future and whateve they create communities will have to adapt it. Sharing information and voluteering help communities to be aware of what should be done. Being part of a starp up projects also solves many issues of the way of being welfare for people. Therefore, young people are capable of helping their communities and as you can see, they do their best.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 333, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'dollar' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'dollars'.
Suggestion: dollars
...nting equipments by putting only twenty dollar by each of us. The school was very old ...
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Line 7, column 20, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun start seems to be countable; consider using: 'many starts'.
Suggestion: many starts
...ey do their best. On the other hand, many start upp business projects have done great j...
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Line 7, column 460, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ted States. This allowed and facilitate many different communities to have far-reaching market...
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Line 7, column 592, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: a; the
...road. Elon Musk is still known to be as a the biggest entreprenuer in the world with ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2485.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 502.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95019920319 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59825490603 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52390438247 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 750.6 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 19.737708794 48.9658058833 40% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 77.65625 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6875 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8125 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155170873213 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0423254341335 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501302547402 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0950414174081 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0334433433755 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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