The author of the passage and the lecturer both discuss about a possible maintaining a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. The reading passage claims three disturbing reasons as atmospheric pressure, not having reservoirs of water and lack of reaching sunlight. Nevertheless, the lecturer believes these reasons are not big challanges to accomplish.
First, the passage claims that atmospheric pressure at Venus is at least 90 times greater than Earht pressure. A force of a hundred kilograms trying to land on Venus would be hard and result it to be crashed because of the pressure would press down. Nevertheless, the lecturer says there should be established a ballon fifty kilometer up to the planet's surface. By doing so, the pressure on the planet get lower and be equal to the Earth's and problem would be solved.
Second, the passage states that there are no reservoirs of wahte on the planet. There are many other chemicals like carbon dioxide, nitrogen and sulfuric acid. But hardy any oxygens found on the surface. In contrast, the lecturer believes if there are chemical things, that would be sufficient to produce water.
Last, the author of the passage says very little sunlight reaches to the planet's surface and roughly 60 percente of it reflects back. Lack of the light prevent to use solar power cells and there would be no electricity for machines and other equipments. However, the lecturer says the clouds on the planet are not very tick. Therefore, adequate amount of sunlight might come to the surface and with a technology, reflecting lights can be moved back to the planet's surface.
To sum up, the reading mainly presents of now availability of human lives on these planets with three significant reasons. Not atmospheric pressure is undoubtly different from the Earth's, not having reservoirs of any water and reaching sunlight is not sufficient. However, the lecturer attempts to claim these obstacles can be solved by making a ballon, producing water and using technology to have the sunlight back from the air.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 326, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'kilometer' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'kilometers'.
Suggestion: kilometers
...re should be established a ballon fifty kilometer up to the planets surface. By doing so,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, at least, in contrast, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 7.30242825607 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 12.0772626932 25% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 22.412803532 36% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 30.3222958057 155% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1721.0 1373.03311258 125% => OK
No of words: 339.0 270.72406181 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07669616519 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6672409124 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 145.348785872 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522123893805 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 419.366225166 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.23620309051 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.4306538109 49.2860985944 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6111111111 110.228320801 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8333333333 21.698381199 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 7.06452816374 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.460891547493 0.272083759551 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129611757807 0.0996497079465 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623454636984 0.0662205650399 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230643481281 0.162205337803 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0784014406037 0.0443174109184 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.3589403974 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 63.6247240618 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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