Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author’s conclusion that, as there were no Palean boats found, woven baskets are not uniquely Palean is a flawed one. To draw that conclusion, evidence is needed about whether Palean people shared the information, about how to make those unique woven baskets, with the Lithos people. Further, evidence regarding the level of the water in Brim River in the times when there is less rainfall and life of Brim River.
Firstly, evidence regarding whether there is any sharing of basket’s manufacturing information by the Palean people to the Lithos people is needed because as you know people wanted to share the information of their new discoveries with other people in ancient times. If Palean people shared the information to Lithos people, then they know the manufacturing procedure and this is the reason for the discovery of the woven baskets in the Lithos village. This weakens the argument.
Secondly, furthermore, the evidence about the level of water in Brim River during the times, when there is less rainfall, is also necessary, for when there is no water or level of water is low, people can cross the rivers by themselves and the boats are not required. What if some Palean people, who know how to make those unique woven baskets, crossed the Brim River and settled there, then this can also be another reason for the discovery of Woven baskets in the Lithos village. This weakens this argument as well.
Thirdly, there is another evidence to be mentioned about the life of the Brim River, for some rivers stop flowing after some time. If the Brim river stopped flowing between the Lithos and Palean villages, then the some of Palean people could have crossed the river easily without the boats and settled there, which also weakens the argument.
This argument could be strengthened if there is any evidence that proves that the level of water is sufficient to make the crossing impossible and Lithos people had shared the manufacturing information with Palean people actually. However, in its current form, this argument is a flawed one.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 345 350
No. of Characters: 1669 1500
No. of Different Words: 127 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.31 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.838 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.356 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 121 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.538 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.107 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.769 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.414 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.629 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 178, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...at conclusion, evidence is needed about whether or not Palean people shared the information, a...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 301, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
... woven baskets, with the Lithos people. Further evidence regarding the level of the wat...
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Line 3, column 29, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...ainfall. Firstly, evidence regarding whether or not there is any sharing of basket's m...
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Line 5, column 277, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...and the boats are not required. What if some of the Palean people, who know how to make tho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, well, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1437.0 2260.96107784 64% => OK
No of words: 286.0 441.139720559 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02447552448 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62357315405 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 204.123752495 57% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.409090909091 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 452.7 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.1458641498 57.8364921388 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.636363636 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0909090909 5.70786347227 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0833448098717 0.218282227539 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0409175462028 0.0743258471296 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459502792546 0.0701772020484 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.060893329524 0.128457276422 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0319471691971 0.0628817314937 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 98.500998004 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.