Nowadays, we are living in very dynamic world. Many people at a big companies has many tasks to do. Also, they can use very advanced technology to get their work done. Some people believe that workers should do just one task in their work to make it in a professional way, while others might disagree with that. When it comes to me I totally agree that people should have many responsibilities at work for two reasons, which I will demonstrate in the following essay.
To begin with, it is very enjoyable to do multi tasks in the same position at work. many works can do many tasks in the same location. In addition, they can get involved in many issue as a group at work to get it done. For example, my brother has an internship at multinational pharmaceutical company last summer. He told me that the coworkers there are working in many tasks at the same time. Such as, they participate to contact the patient to give them advice a bout how they can use their medications, how they can avoid many sides effects of their drugs, and how they can get the right dose on the right time. Moreover, at night, they can make like business meeting with the professional doctors to explain the mechanism of action for these doctors. In fact, he told me that he so happy with that and he can enjoy his job description during this internship. On the other hand, in his local company he do just one task all day long which is just contact the patient over the phone. In deed, he feels always so bored because he is doing the same job everyday. This experience taught me that workers when they have chance to do many activities in the same job they can enjoy their jobs and they can do it in perfect manner.
In addition, workers can get more experience. People who do multi activities during their work they can improve their skills and they can get new knowledge in different fields. For instance, my cousin is working as pharmacy technician at chain pharmacy. Last month, his coworker who work in the computer lab went on vacation for one moth. In fact, his boss gave him opportunity to take his coworker's task as extra responsibility. Moreover, my cousin start to learn new skills. For example, how he can enter the patient information on computer, how he can create new profile, and how he can do the payrolls for the employee. Consequently, he would able to improve his computer skills and he gained new knowledge in different aspect he never had it before. As you can see, when people doing different activities during their jobs they can build their skills.
In sum, I strongly agree that workers should do many tasks during their working day at the same place. This is because they can enjoy their work and they can do it in a good way, and because this will help them to improve their skills in tremendous fields and gain new knowledge.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 69, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'company'?
Suggestion: company
...ery dynamic world. Many people at a big companies has many tasks to do. Also, they can us...
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Line 1, column 251, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a professional way" with adverb for "professional"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... just one task in their work to make it in a professional way, while others might disagree with that....
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Line 3, column 85, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Many
...lti tasks in the same position at work. many works can do many tasks in the same loc...
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Line 3, column 174, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun issue seems to be countable; consider using: 'many issues'.
Suggestion: many issues
.... In addition, they can get involved in many issue as a group at work to get it done. For ...
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Line 3, column 907, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...the other hand, in his local company he do just one task all day long which is jus...
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Line 3, column 999, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put before the verb 'feels'.
Suggestion: always feels
...the patient over the phone. In deed, he feels always so bored because he is doing the same j...
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Line 3, column 1054, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... bored because he is doing the same job everyday. This experience taught me that workers...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 27.0 9.8082437276 275% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 81.0 43.0788530466 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2330.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 513.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54191033138 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48820769477 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.423001949318 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 715.5 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7930348797 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.2962962963 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235760342147 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0845965618991 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0727596847169 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17697420023 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384460910907 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.89 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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