Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Telephone has had greater effects on people’s lives than television.
Throughout history, the human kind has had some improvements in technology. Each new technology has made our life easier. In our technological life we can benefit from the telephone, television and other things like that. Some of them has more benefits than the other. Some people believe that the effects of telephone are greater than television, but some of them not. I agree with the statement above for three main reasons which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
The most important reason that I want to mention first is that telephone has provided people to talk with each other from long distances, but the television cannot. As we all know people need to not feel alone. And most of the times they cannot meet each other in order to speak and enjoy. They can speak with telephone instead, hence they feel happy. For example when I was in my university I had some friends from long distances. With the help of telephone we were capable of talking with each other whenever we wanted.
The second reason which is also important to mention is that we can utilize telephone for job in addition to talk to our friends. In each company there are some employees that need to cooperate with each other. They can use telephone instead of walking in the company and wasting their energy and time. They can use the telephone to have more efficiency in the work environment. For example in my university when I had a request from one of education office staff, she needed to ask a question from other department. For doing that she used the telephone to ask her question. And if the telephone did not exist, so she had to walk to that department.
And the last and important reason which is also good to mention is that we can benefit from telephone in the critical situations to save the life and money of some people. There are some situations in which is needed to send a message to a fire station or ambulance or other things like that. In those tough situations in which is needed the help of police, it is necessary to aware them quickly to arrive in few minutes. So the role of the telephone is important for helping other people.
Briefly, there are some important uses of telephone that can be beneficial for human kind. As I mentioned telephone can be used for talk to our friends from long distances, and also it can be used for job environments in order to facilitate some duties. The telephone is so helpful in emergency situations. So telephone is more useful than television and has affected our life positively.
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Essay evaluation report
Some of them has more benefits than the other.
Some of them have more benefits than the others.
the effects of telephone are greater than television
the effects of telephone are greater than those (the effects) of television
some employees that need to cooperate with each other.
some employees who need to cooperate with each other.
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flaws:
No. of Words: 449 while No. of Different Words: 180
We are expecting:
No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
it means words are repeated or not used efficiently
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 18 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 449 350
No. of Characters: 2042 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.603 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.548 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.475 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 122 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.63 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.634 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.481 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.489 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.191 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 166, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...g distances, but the television cannot. As we all know people need to not feel alo...
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Line 5, column 652, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... so she had to walk to that department. And the last and important reason which ...
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Line 7, column 491, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... is important for helping other people. Briefly, there are some important uses o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, hence, if, second, so, for example, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2097.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67037861915 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56784470315 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.409799554566 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 682.2 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.7420264593 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.6666666667 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6296296296 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.74074074074 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178110552508 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058043619589 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559495266665 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108743209692 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0616857448167 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.