"When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success." Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.
There are various factors contribute to accomplishment. Some believes that good fortune is the key point of success; others think that a considerable amount of effort is the vital ingredient of triumph. In my view, hard work is an indispensable element that leads to success.
On the one hand, without continued hard work and perseverance, ideal objectives cannot be realized. It is general recognized that success is attributed to one's persistence as well as industriousness. From scientists and artists, to revolutionaries to inventors, the common characteristic of them is constant hard work. These great people had never been defeated by countless failure and were always willing to embrace various trials. As a result, remarkable masterpieces and astounding discoveries are left for the offspring. Most important of all, their inspiring successful stories have encouraged more people to conquer setbacks.
On the other hand, good fortune is seemingly relevant to one’s accomplishment on the surface; nevertheless, it is actually based on invisible and substantial commitment. Take my best friend Emma for example. She has successfully obtained the admission to the best design university in the world. Some people say that it is due to her luck of being born in a wealthy family. On the contrary, unlike those who don't know her very well, I am aware of how much effort she had put into her cause. There were countless nights without sleep as well as perseverance that led to her achievement. Therefore, it is unfair as well as ignorant to claim that her success resulted by her fortune.
Admittedly, there are cases that some people reach great success out of pure luck. However, I disagree with this biased perception as the incidents are merely pretty rare exceptions. Furthermore, all of the accomplishment contributed by good fortune is only a temporary fantasy. None of the short-term success could last long without constant hard work.
In sum, I believe that luck is inconsequential or even irrelevant to one's achievement. It is one's positive personality as well as unbelievable contribution that lead to final triumph.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: one's
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Suggestion:
...uraged more people to conquer setbacks. On the other hand, good fortune is seemi...
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...mily. On the contrary, unlike those who dont know her very well, I am aware of how m...
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...s inconsequential or even irrelevant to ones achievement. It is ones positive person...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, furthermore, however, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, for example, as a result, as well as, in my view, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1810.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30791788856 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21233122567 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598240469208 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.7267138543 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.2727272727 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.09090909091 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136598542864 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0365361388737 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0327306752061 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0735993648514 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039627252674 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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