Some people people believe that playing musical instrument can be beneficial in many different ways. Other think that it is a waste of time to playing musical instrument. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Music is a vital source to get relief from all stress and anxiety. However, there are some debatable issues as the given topic which asserts that, playing musical instrument; beneficial for individual or just wastage of time? Through this essay, I will going to explain the both points of view and shape of my opinion by the end.
On one side, some people believe that, playing musical instrument is very beneficial. They strengthen their viewpoint by claiming that, if some one has played musical instrument, he can improve his intellectual skills and also, make it as a profession as well. Moreover, the masses who love to playing musical instruments can Shine as a star in the eyes of the whole world by their talent. Furthermore, they can also connect the people to their tradition and culture with their music. The best epitome of this is Survey conducted by Chandigarh University which proved that, majority of individuals can lead to be successful life who have played musical instrument.
On flip side, there is a group of people who believe that, this is just wastage of time. They make their viewpoint convincing by believing that, it distract the students who are studying, yet. Because, when they start taking interest in music, they forgot that they should give the priority to their study. But, unfortunately, they engrossed in music. The another reason is also be parents think that, in this profession, there children can not get either good earning or be successful in their life. So, they have misperception regarding to musical career.
As we can seen that, there are number of solution to this topic. However, on balance, wieghing both the options, I tend to believe that, it should be the choice of person to person. So that, they can find; it will be beneficial for them or not? In this way, they never regret on their decision in their whole life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, then, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 47.0 24.0651302605 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1562.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88125 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5626829203 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540625 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 5.43587174349 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.0049379668 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7777777778 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7777777778 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 7.06120827912 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31708208231 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111240151248 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0820409030919 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200186861317 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0969265978131 0.056905535591 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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