Authors suggestion of restoring the time devoted to weather and local news to its pervious level to increase revenues is based on fallacious and unwarranted assumptions. Lots of evidences are needed to justify author's suggestion.
For example, There is no evidence that previously when late-night news program has more time to weather and local news the revenues were good. It is possible that the revenue was not very good at that time too. So restoring the previous state might not increase profit unless know the exact revenue when program has more time to weather and local news.
Likewise, author states viewers concern about weather and local news to imply that people want to watch weather and local news more but there is very little evidence of it. Author does not state how many people have complained. May be very few people have complained about it who are fishermen and weather news is important for fishermen. Also author does not disclose the exact content of complaints. It is possilbe that the complaints were againts weather and local news. So unless exact evidence given about who complained, how many people complained or what is complained about we can not jump to any conclusion.
Last, there is no clear evidence why local businesses cancel advertising contracts. May be they are not interested to advertise in TV program anymore. Suppose there is a huge sports festival is going on and the local businesses are more interested to spend advertising money to sports to become more popular. In that case resoring the time to previous state for weather and local news will not change the situation. so unless getting clear evidence why local businesses canceled their contract, author can not conclude that restoring time to previous state will increase revenues.
In conclusion, Lots of evidences are needed to justify wheather restoring devoted time to weather and local news will increase revenues or not. Without these evidence statement can not be justified.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: It is possilbe that the complaints were againts weather and local news.
Error: againts Suggestion: against
Error: possilbe Suggestion: possible
Sentence: In that case resoring the time to previous state for weather and local news will not change the situation. so unless getting clear evidence why local businesses canceled their contract, author can not conclude that restoring time to previous state will increase revenues.
Error: resoring Suggestion: restoring
Sentence: In conclusion, Lots of evidences are needed to justify wheather restoring devoted time to weather and local news will increase revenues or not.
Error: wheather Suggestion: whether
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 326 350
No. of Characters: 1631 1500
No. of Different Words: 140 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.249 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.003 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.497 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.176 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.313 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.529 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.376 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.591 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 299, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ase profit unless know the exact revenue when program has more time to weather an...
^^
Line 5, column 277, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ery few people have complained about it who are fishermen and weather news is important...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 340, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...eather news is important for fishermen. Also author does not disclose the exact cont...
^^^^
Line 7, column 85, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: Maybe
...usinesses cancel advertising contracts. May be they are not interested to advertise in...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 176, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...rogram anymore. Suppose there is a huge sports festival is going on and the local busi...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 417, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...cal news will not change the situation. so unless getting clear evidence why local...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, likewise, may, so, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1670.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 326.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1226993865 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57538675923 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 204.123752495 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.441717791411 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 528.3 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.3480388153 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7777777778 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1111111111 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.70786347227 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313798924566 0.218282227539 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116263428318 0.0743258471296 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111506214557 0.0701772020484 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199682599245 0.128457276422 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0677116971215 0.0628817314937 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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