You need a new accommodation. Write a letter to the manager who you rent your flat from and explain:- Why your family need a new accommodation- When you want to move- How you would like your new accommodation

Submitted by Dan123 on Sun, 08/12/2018 - 09:36

Dear Mr Joseph,

I am writing to inform you that I am looking to shift to a new flat, as I am facing some difficulties in the place I am currently residing in.

I am currently residing with my son at Green Garden Society on MG Road, and he finds commuting daily to school quite inconvenient, as its 10 Kilometers away. We are also having some safety concerns because many burglaries have occurred in the recent past, as a result, we are not finding the place secure anymore.

My son will be sitting for his annual exams by the end of this month, so we are planning to shift by 17th of next month, as moving to a new apartment this month will disturb his studies.

I want a secure environment for my family, therefore I would prefer an apartment with CCTV cameras installed and adequate security staff, particularly during night. In addition, I would prefer our apartment to be near the Central School area, so that my son finds commuting daily to school easy.

I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

Ramesh Kumar

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... studies. I want a secure environment for my family, therefore I would prefer ...
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...with CCTV cameras installed and adequate security staff, particularly during nigh...
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... daily to school easy. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sinc...
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...hool easy. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Ra...
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...oon. Yours sincerely, Ramesh Kumar
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, therefore, in addition, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 872.0 937.175257732 93% => OK
No of words: 187.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66310160428 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5985783525 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.625668449198 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 265.5 290.88556701 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.83505154639 272% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.8633244982 44.8134815571 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 76.5299724578 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.375 16.8248392259 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 4.34317383033 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123871094597 0.216113520407 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.059648954971 0.0766984524023 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575272704827 0.0603063233224 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0718001149038 0.12726935374 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607701891174 0.0580467560999 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 8.37731958763 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 70.7449484536 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 8.71597938144 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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