It is obvious that all people in a society have the right to have their own privacy. Famous individuals because of their popularity among other people have less privacy and in some cases it causes problems for them. I strongly believe that celebrities such as athletes, entertainers, and so on need much more privacy compared with now. In the following paragraph, I will discuss my view using some reasons and examples.
I think today famous individuals have less privacy than the past. With the development of technology news about their private life spread quickly through various media such as TV programs, Internet, social networks, etc. these media are looking for attracting more audiences and viewers to themselves without respecting celebrities' personal life. Therefore, government should ensure more privacy for them. They need to live like ordinary people and this news often leads them to annoy. For instance, last month, in my country, a newspaper revealed romantic relationship between two actors and they were anxious and angry regarding this issue.
Moreover, the lack of privacy damage not only famous people but also their family especially their children. They do no sufficient privacy and they cannot to live similar to ordinary people, and it has affected their normal life. For instance, they are not able to go shopping with their family's members and enjoy it. When their fans see them, they request them to take photographs or to make sing. Thus, people disturb them and waste their time because famous people also need to have their own privacy and to do their daily tasks with freedom similar to others.
To sum up, it is beneficial for both famous individuals and ordinary to respect celebrities' private life. Disclosing the secrets of their life has damaging effects on their life. In addition, it is a waste of time and money for companies and youngsters that follow them. Consequently, society should provide more privacy for well-known people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 345, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ide more privacy for well-known people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, look, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, i think, in addition, such as, in some cases, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1663.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16459627329 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55515335899 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55900621118 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.2659931374 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.5263157895 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9473684211 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180471394504 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0647972009133 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464904222762 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122120337203 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500967298171 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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