Some people believe it is imperative for individuals living in developed nations to reduce their energy consumption and lead a more sustainable lifetyle, given the evidence for global climate change. Others believe that such drastic lifestyle changes are unwarranted, based on the existing evidence for climate change.
This topic raises the controversial issue of whether or not developed societies should reduce the amount of energy that they consume, thus leading a more sustainable lifestyle. Indisputably, this would require very drastic lifestyle changes by the masses, which would not come easily. Nevertheless, there is evidence for global climate change and it is vital for the future of our planet that we start now with reducing our energy consumption. Thus, I generally disagree with the claim that it is unwarranted for individuals in developed nations to change their lifestyle to one that is more sustainable.
First of all, there is evidence for global climate change. I would like to point out that we are seeing hotter summers, colder winters, and more natural disasters than ever before. To illustrate, lets look at the example of the extreme climate changes we have faced in the recent years. It seems that each summer, we are reaching higher and higher temperatures than we did in previous years. In this circumstance, it is clear to see that the planet is going through obvious and dangerous climate changes. Consequently, it is evident that if we do not change our lifestyles to create a more sustainable environment, this pattern of heat will continue indefinitely.
Furthermore, the claim that it is unnecessary for us to make these changes means that we do not care about sustaining our earth for future generations, or for the wildlife of this planet. Specifically, we are facing the melting of polar ice caps, loss of habitats, and extinction of a variety of species. Common sense, personal experience, and scientific evidence have shown us that reducing our energy consumption can prevent more of this damage from occurring. Hence, all of the above demonstrates that developed nations should make lifestyle changes to reduce their energy consumption.
3rd: Admittedly, a lifestyle change of this proportion would be drastic and require a lot of effort from a large population of individuals. This is true especially because developed nations are so accustomed to their everyday habits, many of which lack sustainability. In addition, a huge amount of advocacy and education would be needed to spread the importance and the information that would make this kind of a lifestyle change possible. However, the above arguments do not provide sufficient support to claim that reducing energy consumption is unwarranted. Because saving the planet outweighs the minor inconveniences that may come with creating a widespread lifestyle change, it is essential for the fate of the planet that we reduce our energy consumption we lead more sustainable lives.
In conclusion, although it would require stepping out of comfort zones and the implementation of widespread education, it would be worth it for our society, and for those to come, for us to consciously reduce our consumption of energy. As long as evidence of global climate change exist and the conservation of our planet are involved, the importance of a switch to sustainable lifestyle choices still holds.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
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Suggestion: kind of
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, still, thus, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 33.0505617978 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2590.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 494.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24291497976 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01163691231 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473684210526 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 827.1 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7790321614 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.333333333 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5238095238 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90476190476 5.21951772744 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339076836709 0.243740707755 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112998134005 0.0831039109588 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0778593167457 0.0758088955206 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22150864468 0.150359130593 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0636597266644 0.0667264976115 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 100.480337079 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.