Writing task 1 (a letter)You have borrowed something from your friend for a party and unfortunately it was damaged. Write a letter to your friend to apologise and say– What and when did you borrow?– What happened to it? Why?– What do you suggest to

Dear Sam,

Hope you are fine. I am writing to apologise for damaging the camera that I borrowed last week.

I had borrowed the camera from you last week for my son's birthday party as it has very good focus and zoom. While I was busy clicking the photos, some kid in the party spilled his drink on the floor which i was not aware of. I was so busy in capturing the photos that I didn't noticed the wet floor and lost my balance and fell down. Due to the impact, I lost the grip on the camera and the lens got broken. I took the camera to the nearest service center and the engineer is recommending for lens replacement. I will bear the cost of repair and give the camera back to you once it is in running condition.

Hope that is fine with you and kindly accept my sincere apology for damaging the camera that you had brought with your savings.

Thanks
mohit

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 206, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ty spilled his drink on the floor which i was not aware of. I was so busy in capt...
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Line 5, column 271, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... so busy in capturing the photos that I didnt noticed the wet floor and lost my balan...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 129, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...that you had brought with your savings. Thanks mohit
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 7, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... brought with your savings. Thanks mohit
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 26.3917525773 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 705.0 937.175257732 75% => OK
No of words: 166.0 206.0 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.24698795181 4.54256449028 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.11109126838 2.54303337028 83% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 127.690721649 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578313253012 0.622605031667 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 221.4 290.88556701 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.019423182 44.8134815571 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.3333333333 76.5299724578 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4444444444 16.8248392259 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 4.34317383033 23% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198469902447 0.216113520407 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732831653942 0.0766984524023 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624508629636 0.0603063233224 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16305280929 0.12726935374 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0411404982479 0.0580467560999 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 8.37731958763 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 70.7449484536 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.37 8.71597938144 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.81 7.59969072165 90% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 41.2886597938 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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