Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
An advertisement is the most common way to show the product to many people using television and the internet. Some people believe that the products are much better in the advertisements than in real life. On the other hand, others think the exact opposite of it. From my point of view, products seem ideal in the advertisement even though they are not.
First of all, the companies show only the pros of the product, not the cons. Moreover, a team of people works on an advertisement to make it perfect without any mistake. One of the most common examples of this is the advertisement of burger king. They always showed that it is the cheapest way to get high-quality food even though it is unhealthy. Also, many candy companies also show their product to help people to get out of stress even though those are harmful to teeth.
Secondly, an advertisement is the only difference of the products between two companies which sell the same type of product. Because with the help of the technologies, the quality of those products become the same with a slight difference despite which company's product is it. As a result, the companies focus more on the advertisements to show that their product has more benefits to people. For example, when I choose between two products which are not commonly used such as cakes, I watch the advertisements of companies to get familiar with the pros of the product and decide what to get.
All in all, because the advertisement is the crucial factor of people's decision, companies use it as their chance to show the pros of the product. However, anything is ideal in real life which makes the advertisement seem unreal.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 13.8261648746 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1375.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 288.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77430555556 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75152305958 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 212.727598566 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475694444444 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 427.5 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.0132673267 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.6666666667 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26666666667 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194314036762 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0793857645167 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480015373557 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13209829569 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387191687603 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 86.8835125448 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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