Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this contemporary world, young generations are very much busy in their own created world of technology as well as the culture surrounding them. But are young people not following the societies rules or are they obeying them with full dedication and strictness?. Certainly, some people if asked would agree with the statement that young people are strictly following the rules of the society, while others would say that the question is double-edged due to a great deal of factors involved. As far as I am concerned, I adopt the firm position that the rules of the societies are not very strict. I feel this way for two main reasons that I will explore in the following essay.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that the shortage of time due to their busyness, which is the main cause that restricts them to fufil the socities requirements. My own experience is the best example for that. When I was living in the dormitory few years back, I always found my fellow mates busy in activities like studying, plyaing, partying with friends, late night hangouts, travelling etc. These activites keep themselves too much busy that they do not remember their families and never talk to them. Whenever their parents call them sometimes they simply ignore to talk by saying they are busy or sometimes talk to them with disrespect. This is the story of almost all the young people in todays world. In the name of busyness they disrespect their parents, relatives, elders, guardians. These types of mentality of today's generation should not be entertained in the society.
Having discussed the role of busyness and how it impacts todays generation towards their reponsibilities int he society, let us now move on to another important point that is bad habits. In is not hidden from anybody that young genrations are leaning towards bad habits with a greater pace. Bad habits such as accessive drinking, drugs, gambling, roberry etc are diverting their minds againts society. When young generation come in contact with such activities, they also want to try it and soon it becomes their habits. Young are the future of the society, society have made the rules for young people to follow so that they do not distract themselves from the right path.
In addition to the above points, I would like to mention about a noteworthy research conducted by CSR institute in India. The discovered results suggest that seventy-five percent of the young population indulge themselves in wrong activities.
In summary, I utterly believe that the rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are not too strict. this is because it is not only good for the society or country but also for individuals themselves.
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Comments
this essay does not
this essay does not completely address the subject. the question is, are the rules strict?
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, well, while, i feel, in addition, in summary, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2272.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94989106754 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64603385304 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525054466231 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5918777831 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.272727273 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8636363636 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13636363636 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287167150772 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.088383906079 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116277734688 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167568716391 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117833110555 0.0645574589148 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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