Your friends have the opportunity to choose either one of two types of majors (fields of study), which one of the following two majors do you think is a better choice, and why?
1. A major that would allow him to finish years of study and get a degree sooner (so that he would begin to work full-time quickly).
2. A major that requires many years of study that would provide him with more employment opportunities and offers in the future.
Education is of utmost importance to an individual in this competitive world. Choosing the right field of study is equally crucial in one's life. But is it better to select the course which does not require long time to finish or is it better to spend many years to get the degree? Some people prefer to finish the studies early and begin to work quickly. However, I strongly believe that major that requires many years of study far more outweigh any negative repercussions.
To begin with, many years of studies would provide in depth knowledge of the major subject. Thus, in order to gain more and more information and become an expert in the field everyone should go for long courses. The expertise in the field also opens up the career opportunities. Nowadays, organizations give preference to those who have extensive and detailed knowledge of the work they will be performing in the industry. Hence, people will have tremendous scope and employment opportunities. My own experience is a compelling example, I did a five years integrated program in hospital management. During these five years I did a lot of projects, internships in order to gain mastery in my field and as a result I got placed in top corporate hospital chain of my country with a decent package. This would not be possible if I have done any short course and then applied for the job. Many of my friends who finished their studies early, got a very less paying job and no one is now satisfied with their jobs.
Furthermore, many years of hard work in the studies results in more polished personality of the individual. The person that comes out after extensive training of many years is more aware and informed citizen of the country. Every passing year provides us opportunity to shape our personality better. Moreover, make us capable of facing all the challenges of future endeavours.
In addition, as we all know "every coin has two sides". Therefore, some might be of the opinion that people should spend less years in the studies and focus more on getting the job early. However, from my perspective studying for more years and tremendous benefits for living a better life. Furthermore, a research conducted by Delhi University's faculty of education found that people who have studied for more number of years are more likely to have high paying jobs than those who have done short term courses.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that people should select to study for many years so that they can attain detailed knowledge and become an expert in the field as well as make themselves a better and more informed citizen of the country.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 135, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ht field of study is equally crucial in ones life. But is it better to select the co...
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Line 7, column 132, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun years is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...of the opinion that people should spend less years in the studies and focus more on ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, well, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2188.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86222222222 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69999176953 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497777777778 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 701.1 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3350683495 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1304347826 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5652173913 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.65217391304 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237754582781 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696508437894 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554181477727 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136806038713 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0674968949436 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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