Education is an important aspect for every person. Educated people help a nation to develop and progress. But real development of a society comes with real learning. I agree that competition is hampering in gaining fathom knowledge of any subject and promotes superficial learning. Though healthy competition is good to stay motivated to do hard work in studies. But in rat race of securing good marks, students are giving more stress to techniques through which they can get high grades. I would like explore this more in the following essay.
First and foremost, from primary classes, parents start giving push to their children to get good marks. Most of the time parents motivate their kids to do well in examinations. Less likely they encourage children to gain deep knowledge of a subject. The whole education system is flawed. If a student wants to gain more knowledge on a topic, teachers are not able to entertain such students as they are bound by time restricted syllabus and are supposed to complete it within given period of time frame. In this way teachers are preparing students to do well in the examinations. Education system focuses much on higher grades of students. Moreover, real learning is not needed much to earn higher grades.
Besides this, competition is hampering the quality education, as high grades is the only aim of students. Education system promotes rote learning. In order to do well in exams students give more emphasis on cramming the course and reproduce it in tests. Nowadays, there are many institutes which focuses on shortcuts to solve questions. Instead of giving meaningful knowledge to the students, they are taught to do questions quickly. Till higher school students are given theoretical knowledge. Though, few courses in college provides practical knowledge, but again more importance is given to marks scored in exams. In a way, competition is promoting rote learners, whereas,students who really want to have qualitative learning are not given much heed.
Lastly, however scholars cannot be ignored. These people learn every topic with good understanding. Extraordinary students are less in number. Thus, the education pattern should be made according to all students. There is need of improvement in the way knowledge is imparted from primary level itself, than only some change can be noticed. There is need of real learning among students, so that society and nation can progress in true means. However a healthy competition motivates students to study well, but nowadays, due to increased competition in every sphere people are forgetting true means of quality learning.
To conclude, I would like to reiterate my point that competition is limiting the quality learning and is promoting rote learning. So that students can get good grades irrespective of the fact that they really are understanding the topic or not.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...respective of the fact that they really are understanding the topic or not.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, lastly, moreover, really, so, thus, well, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2420.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 465.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20430107527 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8168381934 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503225806452 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 747.9 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.2370786517 158% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.4879901174 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.625 118.986275619 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.53125 23.4991977007 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.59375 5.21951772744 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 10.2758426966 234% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194049918072 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0463815939656 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442364984307 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119922748569 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391227831544 0.0667264976115 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.1392134831 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 48.8420337079 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 12.1743820225 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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