Technology is improving our lives in different ways and these changes are modifying some business concept. Nowadays we have technology changing the way about the news come us. Print media, especially the newspapers and magazines are being replaced for internet sites and apps because they are cheaper and accessible.
First, it is hard to imagine how many trees are needing to make the paper for magazines and newspaper, in addition, they have to put in this list ink, glue, and all the other raw materials that they need to make those products. All the cost to print this material will be cut and the news will come to us only on the internet because is cheaper furthermore environmental friendly, Can you imagine how many trash will disappear? In fact, a lot of companies here in Brazil are doing this change they created user-friendly sites and apps to attend this new demand, for instance, the magazine Veja, because, their sales have dropped a lot, they have had to reinvent themselves and create new ways to distribute the news which was sites and apps.
Second, in the past the access to the internet was very small, only in big cities, nowadays the scenario is different almost all country has internet. We have how to read, to check, to listen, to stream and to watch only with the cell phone, we don’t need anymore go to the paper store to buy anything. The internet is accessible to us only with one click when the new magazine is launched they arrive in my email before it arrives in the store. I can check the news as soon as I wake up, in my bed. Besides this, I can check if the news is true or if they are fake news. We are in election times here in Brazil and every day the magazines publish fake news and sometimes its difficult to realize if it's true or false before buying the magazine. With the online news, I can check if the notice is real or unreal easily, without the need to buy anything instead to buy all magazine, I am able to buy only the news or apps that I want to use.
In conclusion, Internet and technology are working together to make our lives better, even though some old habits still living, they are leaving our lives and replaced for new ways to read or to see new.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 45, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...t, it is hard to imagine how many trees are needing to make the paper for magazines and new...
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Line 2, column 402, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun trash seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much trash', 'a good deal of trash'.
Suggestion: much trash; a good deal of trash
...ronmental friendly, Can you imagine how many trash will disappear? In fact, a lot of compa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, still, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1813.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48762376238 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37487971721 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502475247525 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.6325984075 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.5 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8571428571 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205061853122 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0789727856583 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746166030731 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121785818379 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465321654497 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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