Collaboration is one of the key characteristics of each community. Over time, human begins have experienced a myriad of pleasant and harsh events and those societies could be successful eventually that worked together for solving the problems. The collaboration is not an intrinsic feature of human kinds and people should learn it throughout their life. As the parents and teachers have the greatest impact on the children so they can teach them to work with each other and consequently they can learn to collaborate in their tasks. As far as I'm concerned, working together on the projects is extremely beneficial for the students and they can learn to do that in their professional future. The following paragraphs will aptly elucidate my viewpoint through outstanding reasons.
First of all, having collaboration in works lets people share their thoughts and abilities on the specific task. Even though some members may be reluctant to share their skills but they finally will accept this work, when they see the notable results of collaboration clearly. By the way of example, one of the most important parts of education in the developed countries is doing work in a group. The Japanese education system is based on collaboration and lets the children experience such informative behavior during elementary school. Therefore, children learn how to work with each other properly and so they can be vigorous individuals for the future. Hence, besides the downsides of the possible conflicts in the group work, people can be more effective in the groups since members can cover their faults.
Another important reason is that huge projects just can be done through a powerful group. Nowadays with the rapid progression of technology and science, people are more specialized than the past and each person can do only one profession appropriately. For instance, every day, there are the vast constructing projects around the world which they are conducting via the professional groups. Also, it is obvious in the cast of the movies, for producing amazing cartoon hundreds of experts are working together and in fact, such a massive production just can be done with the collaboration of many experienced individuals. Consequently, students can divide their projects to the specific parts and each member is responsible just for his or her part and in this way the whole project can be done rapidly.
In brief, contemplating the aforementioned reasons, I can adopt a firm position that working together on the projects is more effective than doing it lonely. Of course, working together can cause some problems such as having conflicts on the ideas even it is possible that some members want to leave the project or their duties and give them to the others but, with a powerful leader this problem can be solved readily.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, finally, first, hence, if, may, so, therefore, for instance, in brief, in fact, of course, such as, by the way, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2369.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13882863341 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86749189633 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498915401302 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 719.1 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5918209983 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.684210526 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2631578947 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.31578947368 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197595204546 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0692619201498 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486086171793 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133838034548 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0190766126049 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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