The author of the given argument appeals to the city government for devoting more money for riverside recreational activities on the basis of an underlying assumption that the river's use for sport activities is sure to increase.However, in order for the government officials to accept the claim the argument still needs adequate crystallization. Apparently, the argument seems to be convincing.Nevertheless, many aspects in it are rife with loopholes.
Firstly, it is mentioned that there have been complaints concerning the river water's foul odor and quality. Although, it is stated that the complaints were brought to notice by the city residents, it is nowhere mentioned as to whether who these residents exactly are. It might be probable that these residents may have just made up an excuse to draw the government's attention. Unless the residents are not local dwellers along the banks of the river, one cannot assume that any other person could know more about the river's aura.
Secondly, despite of the mention of the highest ranking of the river for adequate recreational activities, there is also a note of the rare use of the river for recreational sports.Now arises the question whether the residents of the city really like sports? If yes, then why exactly is there insufficient usage of the river for the same purpose? Drawing an assumption from the given premise, it can be said that there is a possibility of the presence of an additional water-body in the city. It might be a lake or a bay where water-sports are in high practice.For the argument to be more valid, there should have been a lucid mention about the number of water bodies in Mason city.
Thirdly, no adequate statistics regarding the distribution of money by the city department for maintaining riverside recreational facilities has been stated. Had there been an elaborate quantitative note as to what percent of the revenue obtained is spent for the maintenance, the argument would have appeared more sound.May be the maintenance expenditure is sufficient as it can be assumed that water sports are practiced in other water body.Thus, redundant expenses would be borne by the city department for increasing the budget.Rather, the same amount could be involved in some fruitful sectors like education, social work or enterprise and the city state would benefit at large.
In a nutshell, it can therefore be concluded that the author of the argument should focus on such inadequacies before appealing for the river's maintenance to the city government.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK. better to say: maybe those residents are not water sports lovers.
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 420 350
No. of Characters: 2082 1500
No. of Different Words: 207 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.527 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.957 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.811 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.8 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.367 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.609 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The author of the given argument appeals...
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Line 1, column 245, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...or sport activities is sure to increase.However, in order for the government officials ...
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Line 1, column 411, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Nevertheless
...ly, the argument seems to be convincing.Nevertheless, many aspects in it are rife with looph...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...aspects in it are rife with loopholes. Firstly, it is mentioned that there have...
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Line 2, column 239, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...city residents, it is nowhere mentioned as to whether who these residents exactly are. It mig...
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Line 2, column 372, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...have just made up an excuse to draw the governments attention. Unless the residents are not...
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Line 2, column 535, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'rivers'' or 'river's'?
Suggestion: rivers'; river's
... other person could know more about the rivers aura. Secondly, des...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...could know more about the rivers aura. Secondly, despite of the mention of the ...
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Line 3, column 200, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Now
...se of the river for recreational sports.Now arises the question whether the residen...
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Line 3, column 211, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
...iver for recreational sports.Now arises the question whether the residents of the city really like s...
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Line 3, column 580, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
...where water-sports are in high practice.For the argument to be more valid, there sh...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... number of water bodies in Mason city. Thirdly, no adequate statistics regardin...
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Line 4, column 341, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: May
...argument would have appeared more sound.May be the maintenance expenditure is suffi...
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Line 4, column 345, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...ment would have appeared more sound.May be the maintenance expenditure is sufficie...
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Line 4, column 463, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thus
...ports are practiced in other water body.Thus, redundant expenses would be borne by t...
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Line 4, column 552, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Rather
...ty department for increasing the budget.Rather, the same amount could be involved in s...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the city state would benefit at large. In a nutshell, it can therefore be concl...
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Line 5, column 158, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'rivers'' or 'river's'?
Suggestion: rivers'; river's
...h inadequacies before appealing for the rivers maintenance to the city government.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, well, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2123.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 413.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14043583535 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1221875407 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501210653753 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 689.4 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 116.957990739 57.8364921388 202% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 163.307692308 119.503703932 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.7692307692 23.324526521 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0 5.70786347227 228% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.25449101796 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277581334617 0.218282227539 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0979031631842 0.0743258471296 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0725195679956 0.0701772020484 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156963239805 0.128457276422 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437289453989 0.0628817314937 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 14.3799401198 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.55 48.3550499002 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.197005988 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.