Nowadays, some think that children are more neglected by their parents compared to the past and this is due to the hurry and frenetic lifestyle that modern society require. From my point of view, children are suffering of this situation not because parents have less time than that had in the past, but because the quality of the moments which they shared with their mothers or fathers is lowered by the presence of technology.
In the first place, job of parents has to be considered. In fact, many people may think that parents, especially women, are busier in working now rather than in the 50s or 60s. Some high level job occupations are well known to increase pressure and stress as well as work hours and might be responsible of the missed attention to children. However, going back in time, there were more people attending humble manual jobs such as workmen in industries and they were forced to crazy working hours too but with low salaries and probably with less gratification. Evidently, parents in the past were busy as the ones of the present.
Instead, in my opinion, what is responsible of the pain of children in relation of their parents is partly the role of technology in modern times. For example, children are often left alone to play video games or to watch television programs without effectively doing something together with their mothers or dads. When little kids experiment loneliness, they perhaps start to feel a sense of rejection from their parents. Probably, it would be better for them spending their free time in playing games outside, maybe in a park, clearly along with their parents.
To conclude, although it is undoubted that people today have big expectations on their careers causing little concerns to their children, I believe that unhappiness of children is more because of technology, which does not give the opportunity to share good moments with their parents.
- The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000. 84
- The diagram below shows how geothemal energy is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 86
- Modern lifestyles mean that many parents have little time for their children. Many children suffer because they do not get as much attention from their parents as children did in the past 84
- The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 78
- Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks.Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages? 89
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, well, as to, for example, in fact, such as, as well as, in my opinion, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 7.0 243% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.15609756098 285% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 5.60731707317 482% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 33.7804878049 166% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1595.0 965.302439024 165% => OK
No of words: 322.0 196.424390244 164% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95341614907 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 3.73543355544 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55056687454 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 106.607317073 173% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 283.868780488 170% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.060735943 43.030603864 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.916666667 112.824112599 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8333333333 22.9334400587 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.25 5.23603664747 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.13902439024 527% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.432571801467 0.215688989381 201% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143269640267 0.103423049105 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0840114446681 0.0843802449381 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257628835945 0.15604864568 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.089041642291 0.0819641961636 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.2329268293 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 61.2550243902 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.3012195122 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 11.4140731707 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 40.7170731707 182% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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