TPO-10 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Sports are important in everyones lives. They give a sort of refreshment and help us escape the daily grind of life and work.
However, playing computer games is a waste of time and in particular children should not be allowed to play them.
I strongly agree with the writer's claim. The following essay gives the reasons behind holding my opinion.

Firstly, playing games, either indoor or outdoor is essential for children. Outdoor games like soccer, baseball, and football etc., increases the physical activity in children, therefore they become fit and healthy. Besides this, indoor games like chess, puzzles, and building blocks etc., enhances the creativity and IQ in children. However, playing computer games is a waste of time that leads to many adverse effects like eye sight problem and lack of physical activity. Moreover, the computer games cause a lot of misconception ,especially to young children, as they not completely matured. In this regard, I can give the best example of my friend, who is addicted to computer games. He loves playing computer games and spend most of his time with them. As a result, he developed poor eye sight for which he is still suffering and can not cure it completely.

Secondly, children develop a strong addiction towards computer games as a result they ignore studies further leading to poor grades in academics. In addition, their interaction with friends or family members decreases. In contrast, playing other games would increase the interaction and communication skills of child. In this instance, I can give my own compelling example, since, I like to play the games but not the computer games, I made really good friends during the course of that. whereas, my cousin is very much addicted to computer games and hardly played games with his friends, as a result he have a very few friends.

Finally, to put in a nut shell, I strongly believe that although, playing games is important, especially for children, for their physical and mental development, playing computer games is a waste of time and children should not be allowed to play them as they have harmful effects on kids.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, whereas, in addition, in contrast, in particular, sort of, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1819.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12394366197 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62919081023 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523943661972 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6861607474 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7368421053 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6842105263 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.47368421053 5.45110844103 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332366754885 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107757160505 0.076458572812 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106474261841 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205336960671 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.134259082501 0.0645574589148 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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