The passage concludes that skateboarding should be barred in the Central Plaza so that business will return to its high level. The author highlights the problems caused after increased popularity of the skateboarding. While at first reading the argument seems quite conceivable, the closer look spells out many assumptions that could undermine its assertion.
Firstly, the author states that number of people coming for shopping at plaza have been decreased and there is exponential increase in popularity of the skateboarding. The reason given by the arguer does not seems substantial, as the number of people coming for skateboarding might be interested in shopping in this way the skateboarding should prove profitable for the shops at the Central Plaza. There may be other reasons contributing to the decrease in business at plaza. Perhaps the products of shops are not liked by potential buyers. A survey should be conducted to know the valid reason behind the drop in purchasing, as the popularity of skateboarding should contribute in the business positively and not vice-versa.
Secondly, the arguer asserts that there is increase in amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Maybe some antisocial people are contributing to such activities. In such case, security of the plaza should be increased. More number of guards should be appointed in order to maintain the decorum of the shopping center. Moreover, maybe the trash is thrown by the shopkeepers. All these reasons maybe contributing to the decrease in number of shoppers coming there. Proper scrutiny of the shopping center should be done, before blindly blaming the people coming for skateboarding. Additionally, the author has not provided any evidence regarding this issue.
Lastly, the author has not provided any statistical data or any survey report. The argument has no evidence to ratify its assertions. Thus, there is no guarantee that closing the skateboarding in the plaza will result in increased sales of the products. However, there are chances that closure of skateboarding will result in more loss of the shops in the plaza, as it will result in decrease in number of people coming there. Therefore, before making any decision all the factors should be considered and cogitative thought should be given to it.
To conclude, though it seems that the author has done some research before backing the prospect of closing the skateboarding at the Central Plaza in order to increase the profit of the business of the shops, an in-depth scrutiny reveals that none of the arguments put forth are backed by exhaustive analysis; thus, providing little credible support. As it stands, the recommendations look flawed in multiple respects and may not give the results as the author expects.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 444 350
No. of Characters: 2283 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.59 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.142 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.813 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 185 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.304 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.98 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.565 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.308 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.486 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.073 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 209, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'seem'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: seem
...The reason given by the arguer does not seems substantial, as the number of people co...
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Line 3, column 209, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'seem'
Suggestion: seem
...The reason given by the arguer does not seems substantial, as the number of people co...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, look, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2341.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 444.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27252252252 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90393059153 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448198198198 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 717.3 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 66.1892800531 57.8364921388 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.782608696 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3043478261 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13043478261 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194605058065 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566574981602 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055725968469 0.0701772020484 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118321337018 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381449171071 0.0628817314937 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 98.500998004 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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