Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Advertising is one of the most important parameters for selling products. Usually, companies advertise their new products. Advertisements can deceive or persuade people to buy a specific product. However, it does not mean that the product quality is higher than another one. Advertising for young children is much easier because children are easily deceived by some cartoonish advertisement. Some agree that there should be freedom in television advertising for young children, others disagree. Even though advertising for young children might be beneficial for the company that sells the product, in my view, television advertising for young children has a reverse effect on them because of two important reasons.
Firstly, children cannot decide which product is better. The brain is developing and growing rapidly in the first years of life. The brain gets mature at a minimum age of five. Before that, the brain is immature and cannot separate the good and the bad from each other. Also, young children love cartoons and animation movies. It might get even better if the cartoon is more colorful, which Cartoon designers are aware of. Thus, when a company manufactures a new product for children, it hires a cartoon designer, signs a contract with him, pays the designer and wants a cartoon advertisement in return. Even if the product is detrimental to juvenile children, the designer designs an advertisement for the product and demonstrates it as a healthy product. Subsequently, the child watches the advertisement and begs his/her parents to buy the product for him/her. Conclusively, the advertisements persuade children to buy their products much easier than adults.
Second, some advertisements for adults are not suitable for children and may have a consequent negative impact on society. There are some products labeled only for adults, for example, cigarettes, wines, alcohols, sexual instruments, and etcetera. As I explained before, a child's brain is developing progressively. The developing requires new information. Therefore, all the information the child learns is being classified on his mind. Good or bad information become a component of the child's brain and mind. As the child grows up and moves into adulthood, the information is part of his mind. If he learns bad information, his unconsciousness leads him to harm the society, especially if he gets to be a prominent person or a politician. Unfortunately, most of the politicians had problems when they were pre-schoolers. As we can see, there is a direct relation between unsuitable advertisements for young children and the health of society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 425, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean ''?
...sement. Some agree that there should be freedom in television advertising for young chi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2216.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36561743341 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12820748044 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525423728814 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.0328918885 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0740740741 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2962962963 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.40740740741 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166866007876 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.049525782171 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059819922364 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120062220502 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0613662320459 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.27 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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