TPO 9 -Independent task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Children brain is forming in childhood. Brain requires information to develop and grow. This information should come from learning, where learning is identified as a brain's process for all ages. Some agree that technology obstructs learning process, therefore make children less creative. Others disagree with the hampering statement. Even though technology brings new facets of the contemporary world to children, in my view, it actually impedes the learning process of the children, which results in their creativity because of two important reasons.
First of all, technology and its applications are sufficiently interesting for a child with an immature brain in compare to a mature adult person. Children adapted to the technological environment by doing their tasks with ease in an intriguing world. Hobbies, toys, and plays in past are not absorbing children anymore. They are not as interesting as new plays and toys, which are entangled with technology. For instance, I remember my nephew's birthday last summer. He was getting seven at that time and he had to go to school at the end of the season. I bought him a present which was a board game- The game of life. I was certain that he will enjoy it, due to the fact that I played it with my siblings in my childhood and I loved it so much. Neverwithstanding, After my nephew opened it, he seemed not impressed about it. After a while, he put it on the top of the pile of presents and open another present, which was a new computer game. His eyes sparkled instantly and he thrilled about it . To be honest, I think he forgot about my present. This example showed me how children are interested in using others creativity rather than use their own creativity to come up with something novel.
Second, technology advancement is the main victim for ruining the creativity of children. It also oblige them to use technology instead of rudimentary tasks. children form preceding decades, are parents today. The revolution of technology occurs at this period, and parents adapted to this scientific breakthrough. Because of this dramatically change, they have obsessed with technology and its facilities. Thus they have filled the space around themselves by lots of high technology devices. Thus, When a baby born in a house, the devices still remain in the resident and there is no endeavor to perish them. As the baby grows up in a technological environment, he/she will adapt to this kind of situation. This will form up child's desires to technology devices rather than build it up from basic devices and plays. Conclusively, parents should blame themselves for this environment that they provided for their child, and maybe they should blame the technology for their children uncreativeness.
As we see, technology is detrimental for children creativity. Parents should provide a calm environment compose of both technology and old plays to help their child growing in the modern world and develop creativity progressively.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 159, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Children
...chnology rather than rudimentary tasks. children form the precede decades, are parents t...
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Line 5, column 173, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...r than rudimentary tasks. children form the precede decades, are parents today. The revolut...
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Line 5, column 213, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...the precede decades, are parents today. The revolutionize of technology occurs at this period, an...
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Line 5, column 405, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...sed with technology and its facilities. Thus they fill the space around themselves b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, if, second, so, therefore, thus, i think, kind of, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2133.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15217391304 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87740373646 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528985507246 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.407263264 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.1785714286 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7857142857 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.78571428571 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187107784226 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0521706218868 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496937201404 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129423814782 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0186103291814 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.