The arguement presented here states that according to a survey which showed a conformity of citizens to government Nutritional Program declares, however, without certainty or judgment that the citizens of Forsythe have adopted a more healthful lifestyle. The argument can be seriously undermined based on certain assumptions which doesn't necessarily be called as a healthy lifestyle.
Firstly, the author draws a vague conclusion that the people have started leading a healthfully beneficial lifestyle based on a report. However, we need to analyze the reports of the survey, and determine whether the survey is reliable or not. How many citizens were interviewed during the survey, to what age group they did belong, what questions were asked during the survey etc. Did the questions just asked the citizens about they conform to the nutrtion program or not, it would have made the citizens to say yes. So, we need to evaluate the overall reliability of the survey report, which we don't know.
Secondly, a healthful lifestyle is not something only about food, it revolves around having an exercise, on a regualr basis, a good diet as well as good and hygeinic habits, which determines the entire objective of a healthy person. Not limited to this, healthful conditions also mean the people to be fit, not only physically, but also mentally, followed by some meditation on a daily basis. The author restricts this scope of healthful lifestyle to some nutrition program held by the government.
Moreover, author emphasizes on the increased sale of Kiran, which reduces Cholestrol in the body, and further correlates this with the reduced sale of Sulia, a food that the healthiest people in the city consider beneficial. However, there's no logical correlation between the two as increased consumption of Kiran doesn't necessarily the reason for the reduced consumption of Sulia.
In conclusion, governement always expects its citizens to be healthy and safe, and provides better programmes and nutrition for the well being of its people who, will in turn dedicate for the growth of the nation. Although the author's argument strives out to be a subtle argument, but it does necessarily have holes and assumptions, which if unwarranted, proves the claim false.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The arguement presented here states that according to a survey which showed a conformity of citizens to government Nutritional Program declares, however, without certainty or judgment that the citizens of Forsythe have adopted a more healthful lifestyle.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: How many citizens were interviewed during the survey, to what age group they did belong, what questions were asked during the survey etc. Did the questions just asked the citizens about they conform to the nutrtion program or not, it would have made the citizens to say yes.
Error: nutrtion Suggestion: nutrition
Sentence: Secondly, a healthful lifestyle is not something only about food, it revolves around having an exercise, on a regualr basis, a good diet as well as good and hygeinic habits, which determines the entire objective of a healthy person.
Error: hygeinic Suggestion: hymen
Error: regualr Suggestion: regular
Sentence: In conclusion, governement always expects its citizens to be healthy and safe, and provides better programmes and nutrition for the well being of its people who, will in turn dedicate for the growth of the nation.
Error: governement Suggestion: government
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 366 350
No. of Characters: 1848 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.374 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.049 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.776 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 146 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.154 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.646 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.769 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.347 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.65 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 332, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ined based on certain assumptions which doesnt necessarily be called as a healthy life...
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Line 3, column 599, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...iability of the survey report, which we dont know. Secondly, a healthful lifestyl...
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Line 7, column 159, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'food'.
Suggestion: food
...es this with the reduced sale of Sulia, a food that the healthiest people in the city ...
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Line 7, column 235, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
... the city consider beneficial. However, theres no logical correlation between the two ...
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Line 7, column 315, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...e two as increased consumption of Kiran doesnt necessarily the reason for the reduced ...
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Line 9, column 228, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... the growth of the nation. Although the authors argument strives out to be a subtle arg...
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Line 9, column 340, Rule ID: IF_IS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...arily have holes and assumptions, which if unwarranted, proves the claim false.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1905.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 363.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2479338843 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8288724893 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550964187328 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7836134011 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.071428571 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9285714286 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35714285714 5.70786347227 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191815478645 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645024427281 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724407060807 0.0701772020484 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0972451292433 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0713081161179 0.0628817314937 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.32208582834 115% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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