Students from rural areas often find it difficult to access university education. Some people think that it should become easier for them to study at universities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
In my opinion, youth from rural area can be easier entering universities. Term Rural, is the outside place from the city, and this place usually get big attention from government on purpose to distribute national development. Implementation of government program usually give concrete scholarship for indigene youth, therefore they can develop their region. Second, a priority to indigene entering university is available based on regulation of the government. And the last one is rivalry from the origin region is not too excessively.
Scholarship from the government is the first access for rural youth to entering universities. There some availably position for youth from rural area in big universities pointing by government, deplorable this occasion sometimes cannot be filled.
Beside available position, origin governments provide fellowship to youth who want to go university widely. In rural area, government encourage youth with many ways. They should be complete the administration and pass test, and the next step to study helped by them.
Last reason why I said rural youth can be easier entering universities is less of rivalry from origin region. Many people unaware how important education is, therefore they lead their child not to get highly education, can completely their financial need is quiet enough.
Based from my explanation there are many reason how easy rural youth joining universities, hence personal and family aware to reach it totally low. It should be our responsibility to change traditional paradigm people in rural region that highly education is important and easy to get.
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