young people decision
In the modern era, families became very complicated. Economical and geographical circumstances are altered comparing decades ago. The stories that we have heard about our parents when they were young, are completely strange for us. Due to the fact that, everything has been changed. There is a debate in this case as to what are the reasons that young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives comparing young people who lived in the past. An outstanding article states that young people can make better by their own in these days. I strongly concur with it. In the following paragraphs, I will attempt to investigate three reasons to justify my preference.
First thing is occurring to the mind is that economic situation was much better in the past. Hence, young man and woman did not need to leave their family and parents could provide them every demand they had. It is obvious that when parents pay for young people they lose their independence from their family and as result, parents feel that they can make decisions more accurately. For instance, my father started to study medical science despite his interest in mathematics because my grandfather advised him that medical science has a better future for him.
The second thing worth to be mention is that the advent of technology makes young people more advance. Every student nowadays can benefit from technology and learns about all the things on the internet. In this way, parents feel that their child has more information about every topic. Therefore, they can decide better owing to the fact that parents are not professional in using technology and always they ask help from their son or daughter to help them by their problems with their cell phones or internet. Consequently, parents do not feel that they have better knowledge to make a decision and they feel that it is appropriate to let young people decide on their own. According to statistics published by the University of Tehran, more than 65 percent of users on the internet have less than 20 years old, which is yet gain highlight that young people are using more from the internet and they can take more benefit of it.
In summary, all the presented ideas above bring us to the conclusion that in recent days due to the economic problem groups of young people need to migrate and study abroad and it will give them more independence and also faster adoption of technology will help them to decide more accurately than before.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, as to, for instance, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2067.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.875 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47142691692 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.6121440049 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.789473684 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3157894737 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84210526316 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288261309829 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0914181070686 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12143054784 0.0737576698707 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194186111328 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0793610330278 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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